Senryu Web of Deceit
man's web of deceit
possesses not loveliness
of fine spider's web
Jan. 08
Dorothy Alves Holmes
A Poet Who Loves To Sing
rarebird
I like this (not) haiku
I like this (not) haiku
sonetta
brilliant Dorothy! and apropos for what is happening here!
brilliant Dorothy! and apropos for what is happening here!
kath
Bravo! A wealth of wisdom in a mere ten words. Keep singing Dorothy!!! :) k xxxxxxxxx
Bravo! A wealth of wisdom in a mere ten words. Keep singing Dorothy!!! :) k xxxxxxxxx
spbsdude
How true this is, nature is beautiful, but man's deceit is ugly. An apt metaphor. I shall read more of these now.
How true this is, nature is beautiful, but man's deceit is ugly. An apt metaphor. I shall read more of these now.
tom balch
Wise Haiku, well penned.
Wise Haiku, well penned.
poetwithcancer
Dear Dorothy, // Did you accidentally leave out the word "a" in the last line? "of a spider's web" would be five syllables, so I venture to guess you accidentally left out the "a." // In my poem "Seven for Heaven: Haiku, On Two Straight Guys Who Loved Each Other," I accidentally left out a whole word--the word "be"--which fortunately someone pointed out to me. // This poem here is a good contrast poem. Even though a spider's web is usually set up as a death-trap for insects and other tiny creatures, it has a beauty of its own, which is greatly enhanced by dew. Have you ever seen a spider's web, glistening with dew-drops as the morning sun strikes it with shafts of illumination? Like the crown jewels for beauty. // Man's web of deceit--many webs of deceit--no loveliness there, to counterbalance the dark purpose. // Good contrast poem. It stimulated many images and thoughts in my mind and heart. // Once again, I regret that PoetFreak does not have a rating system, for it would be a privilege to give this poem the highest rating allowed, of one were allowed at all! // Bye now. // --Michael LP, Mr. Poet
Dear Dorothy, // Did you accidentally leave out the word "a" in the last line? "of a spider's web" would be five syllables, so I venture to guess you accidentally left out the "a." // In my poem "Seven for Heaven: Haiku, On Two Straight Guys Who Loved Each Other," I accidentally left out a whole word--the word "be"--which fortunately someone pointed out to me. // This poem here is a good contrast poem. Even though a spider's web is usually set up as a death-trap for insects and other tiny creatures, it has a beauty of its own, which is greatly enhanced by dew. Have you ever seen a spider's web, glistening with dew-drops as the morning sun strikes it with shafts of illumination? Like the crown jewels for beauty. // Man's web of deceit--many webs of deceit--no loveliness there, to counterbalance the dark purpose. // Good contrast poem. It stimulated many images and thoughts in my mind and heart. // Once again, I regret that PoetFreak does not have a rating system, for it would be a privilege to give this poem the highest rating allowed, of one were allowed at all! // Bye now. // --Michael LP, Mr. Poet
Clever writing Dorothy with the "not loveliness". Maybe it could be called a Senryu~~