A Diminished Hexaverse.A poem containing stanzas of 5 lines, then 4 lines, then 3 lines, then 2 lines, ending with one word. The syllables in each stanza correspond to the number of lines, i.e. 5 in each line in the first stanza, 4 in the second stanza and so on...
''Still"
Life looks forbidden
For you are not here
It is sorrowful
With sad emptiness
Drowning into hope
Life looks fearsome
Cold and airy
For the distance
Between the skies
So clouded
Yet stars blaze
The moon smiles
Only
For love
Still
Written on the night of the 25th February,2011
©Munia Khan 2011
11Confessions
Each word is so powerful in this poem - and I absolutely *loved* the beginning.
Each word is so powerful in this poem - and I absolutely *loved* the beginning.
Susan Jarvis
You have moulded your message around the intracies of this form just perfectly... an admirably crafted delight of a poem. :)
You have moulded your message around the intracies of this form just perfectly... an admirably crafted delight of a poem. :)
Simply Bono Razek
beautiful-so very beautiful..it reads like a sigh...
beautiful-so very beautiful..it reads like a sigh...
Dorothy A. Holmes apwlts2
So wonderful...from heart to pen...Thank you! I love this form...I was introduced to it as a "Parenthetic" back in the 70's...to be read also from the bottom ...up...(it is lovely both ways) try it! Dorothy A Poet Who Loves to Sing
So wonderful...from heart to pen...Thank you! I love this form...I was introduced to it as a "Parenthetic" back in the 70's...to be read also from the bottom ...up...(it is lovely both ways) try it! Dorothy A Poet Who Loves to Sing
Kamala
Late to read this one. Its bringing in a flurry of emotions. Immediately getting deep into the heart.
Late to read this one. Its bringing in a flurry of emotions. Immediately getting deep into the heart.
Raju Baruah
stunning piece ...Munia...really impressed :-)
stunning piece ...Munia...really impressed :-)
welshpoet (Chris Smith)
It is always a delight to read your words
It is always a delight to read your words
Karin Anderson
So beautifully written Munia and has evoked a stunning atmosphere. Wonderful poetry~~
So beautifully written Munia and has evoked a stunning atmosphere. Wonderful poetry~~
seema chowdhury
Bold and beautiful. very nice expression , full of passion and love.
Bold and beautiful. very nice expression , full of passion and love.
BlackHearted-Bard
The ability to long is perhaps our greatest (or worst) human attribute. Beautiful poetry in perfect form
The ability to long is perhaps our greatest (or worst) human attribute. Beautiful poetry in perfect form
Meggie Gultiano
still....it is there..and that's important..lovely lines, Munia
still....it is there..and that's important..lovely lines, Munia
John X. McCullagh
nicely done!
nicely done!
sonetta
still the poet, always the poet, ever the poet!!
still the poet, always the poet, ever the poet!!
narain, jay p.
wonderful poem and poetic structure.
wonderful poem and poetic structure.
Frank James Ryan Jr./FjR
Woooooooooooooooooosh ! Young Lady, you are consistently ramping your skill-set & poetic-spectrum potential up,up & AWAY ! Such a style as "any" form of Hexaverse is a Thinkingpoets poem, and NOT an easy feat. This sparkles, just like its Author ! ~FjR ~
Woooooooooooooooooosh ! Young Lady, you are consistently ramping your skill-set & poetic-spectrum potential up,up & AWAY ! Such a style as "any" form of Hexaverse is a Thinkingpoets poem, and NOT an easy feat. This sparkles, just like its Author ! ~FjR ~
sridevi
Ah...how I love starting my day with poetry like this ..simply uperb :)..the second stanza's simply amazing :)
Ah...how I love starting my day with poetry like this ..simply uperb :)..the second stanza's simply amazing :)
eleanor prince
I'm in awe of your penning, Munia... superb
I'm in awe of your penning, Munia... superb
erik99
To make a real poem like this, out of a form as restricting as this, takes more than talent, a true poetic spirit.
To make a real poem like this, out of a form as restricting as this, takes more than talent, a true poetic spirit.
Frank Lambert
I love the word still, so many meanings and so well crafted into this verse...
I love the word still, so many meanings and so well crafted into this verse...
Wow. Utterly impressive! I just tried reading it from the bottom up as Dorothy suggested and it is perfect both ways! Marvelous! Excellent! It is so beautiful yet so bittersweet, so aptly expressed and so perfectly.