Old rough drafts, fooling around with styles. Title could change too.. eg. kind of you?

in all kindness

I.

tuck a curl of mischief
behind its ear
place a cucumber hand
on its flushed cheek
trace a baby’s breath kiss
on its frank crown
pull the feather down
-right up to its chin-
and then smother it
(use a heavy pillow)
smother it now
(you know best)
let it rest

II.

Having tucked a defiant curl behind its ear
Placed a temperate hand on its flushed cheek
Traced a hibiscus kiss on its brazen crown
And pulled the feather-light down right up to its chin
Now smother that thought with a weighty pillow
Into an endless slumber

a_start
Thanks for your comments. I have always liked the first draft better too... But the second one is meant to be more lulling... You get to the end and never realize the horror of the murder that went on... The language wraps it like an alibi?

Writer
I like Draft I better :)

heterodynemind
Nice. Definitely different.

Ismael Iniguez
i like the first draft better, its more emo