Nothing More Than This
The light has dropped a curtain for the night
and once more you’re past the limits of
my vision. I can’t reach for you or
hear you speak my name, but there
you are in cloudy wings
of time flown by.
This burning flame
flickers like an oil-lamp
that wanes but never quite dies out.
The one truth I know I can rely on;
your fingers write desire upon my skin.
Where recognition lingers in refusal to depart,
suspended beyond day, before the dark,
a ballet danced, en croix, from the start.
stellar
really great wordings aria...i really miss your works...original, romantic, and beautiful...^_^ v
really great wordings aria...i really miss your works...original, romantic, and beautiful...^_^ v
JanetGunn
This is really a beautiful poem. Truly written from the heart.
This is really a beautiful poem. Truly written from the heart.
Raju Baruah
... this is beautiful...soft like the midnight flute...Tfs
... this is beautiful...soft like the midnight flute...Tfs
dahlusion
For a "novice poet" [as you have stated in your profile], this poem goes beyond the pain of longing and to the heat of soul: "your fingers write desire upon my skin", this is one of the most beautiful and poetically mature lines I have read in a long time. This piece places the reader inside of your heart where wisdom and love reside. Not bad, Novice Poet.
For a "novice poet" [as you have stated in your profile], this poem goes beyond the pain of longing and to the heat of soul: "your fingers write desire upon my skin", this is one of the most beautiful and poetically mature lines I have read in a long time. This piece places the reader inside of your heart where wisdom and love reside. Not bad, Novice Poet.
angel33614
I love the use of allegory in this poem, the emotional longing and feeling pulls at the very core of my heart, bravo! I feel the longing of the night, represents something or perhaps someone of the past, perhaps someone who know has moved on and is living with the wings of the angels. The buring flame of the memory that lies on in your heart and soul, so close you can feel it but never close enough, as the flame flickers and with time has grown dimmer of the vision of the light. Perhaps I see, perhaps I am blind. Purity of the soul, journey well!!! with grace and humility ANGEL
I love the use of allegory in this poem, the emotional longing and feeling pulls at the very core of my heart, bravo! I feel the longing of the night, represents something or perhaps someone of the past, perhaps someone who know has moved on and is living with the wings of the angels. The buring flame of the memory that lies on in your heart and soul, so close you can feel it but never close enough, as the flame flickers and with time has grown dimmer of the vision of the light. Perhaps I see, perhaps I am blind. Purity of the soul, journey well!!! with grace and humility ANGEL
MadameGinga
This my dear Aria is surreal yet tangible simultaneously, (if that's possible, LOL). I am adrift with the longing that I feel within these lines!
This my dear Aria is surreal yet tangible simultaneously, (if that's possible, LOL). I am adrift with the longing that I feel within these lines!
Susan Jarvis
A wistful, graceful and beautiful poem that fans out on the page like the 'wings of time gone by' - an admirable write.
A wistful, graceful and beautiful poem that fans out on the page like the 'wings of time gone by' - an admirable write.
dano
aria your style is always so compelling... strong in words and sentiment and always true in emotion... nicely written
aria your style is always so compelling... strong in words and sentiment and always true in emotion... nicely written
Genova Maaa
your fingers write desire upon my skin. very nice Aria
your fingers write desire upon my skin. very nice Aria
TinaD
Another good one, Aria. Love the cloudy wings of time flown by. Keep them coming!
Another good one, Aria. Love the cloudy wings of time flown by. Keep them coming!
kah
Aria! Excellent writing - my goodness, I can feel the pure longing in this poem. Very well done!
Aria! Excellent writing - my goodness, I can feel the pure longing in this poem. Very well done!
Alison Cassidy
Wistful, softly penned angst. 'Your fingers write desire upon my skin' is particularly memorable. A poem to whet the discerning reader's appetite. I look forward to the next one. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
Wistful, softly penned angst. 'Your fingers write desire upon my skin' is particularly memorable. A poem to whet the discerning reader's appetite. I look forward to the next one. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
Nikunj
wow is the word , mysterious and mystical , romantic and filled with longing and desires , the poem fills the eyes of the mind and heart
wow is the word , mysterious and mystical , romantic and filled with longing and desires , the poem fills the eyes of the mind and heart
Munia Khan
There's a mysterious sensuality running through this beautiful piece of work.Very wonderful.I must read you from now on..Thank you very much for joining us here..
There's a mysterious sensuality running through this beautiful piece of work.Very wonderful.I must read you from now on..Thank you very much for joining us here..
Karin Anderson
Welcome Aria and it is such a treat to find your poem. A tender romantic write that lingers in the heart. My favorite line is "your fingers write desire upon my skin". Look forward to reading more of your beautiful poetry.
Welcome Aria and it is such a treat to find your poem. A tender romantic write that lingers in the heart. My favorite line is "your fingers write desire upon my skin". Look forward to reading more of your beautiful poetry.
Frank James Ryan Jr./FjR
Impressive, textbook paradigm form contempo-free-verse....Like the subtle & tasteful sensual sprinklings....Stellar crafting....~FjR ~
Impressive, textbook paradigm form contempo-free-verse....Like the subtle & tasteful sensual sprinklings....Stellar crafting....~FjR ~
rema renjini nair
a loving write..........
a loving write..........
Keith Robinson
devoted memories...
devoted memories...
seema chowdhury
very nice and an emotional poem. welcome to poet freak.
very nice and an emotional poem. welcome to poet freak.
sonetta
i love the understated title of this heart-filled poem....oh, love your name too... :)
i love the understated title of this heart-filled poem....oh, love your name too... :)
Michael S. Simpson
This reads aloud beautifully; fine line breaks; a tale of star-crossed lovers, replete with longing and "suspended beyond day...". Well done!
This reads aloud beautifully; fine line breaks; a tale of star-crossed lovers, replete with longing and "suspended beyond day...". Well done!
Sandra Dodd
Welcome to PF with this fine first posting you are off to a great start
Welcome to PF with this fine first posting you are off to a great start
Fay Slimm
A fine piece of poetic prose written with good use of imagery and creatively sensual phrasing - I thoroughly enjoyed the verse Aria and look forward to reading more of your excitingly fresh work- welcome to P.F. and best wishes for your future postings - - from Fay.
A fine piece of poetic prose written with good use of imagery and creatively sensual phrasing - I thoroughly enjoyed the verse Aria and look forward to reading more of your excitingly fresh work- welcome to P.F. and best wishes for your future postings - - from Fay.
Dorothy A. Holmes apwlts2
Aria, your poetic voice sings a melody in this verse, my heart knows well...what a lovely poem. Dorothy A Poet Who Loves To Sing
Aria, your poetic voice sings a melody in this verse, my heart knows well...what a lovely poem. Dorothy A Poet Who Loves To Sing
Ron Peat
This is still good even the 5 or 6 time you've finished reading it. A strong piece of work Aria// A poet friend/ RH Peat
This is still good even the 5 or 6 time you've finished reading it. A strong piece of work Aria// A poet friend/ RH Peat
Ency Bearis
Such so nice to read - awesome poem.
Such so nice to read - awesome poem.
MindNumbing
So beautiful, Aria. The form is fascinating, giving the reader the feeling of a roller-coaster ride, which I'm sure is similar to the relationship itself. Wonderful job.
So beautiful, Aria. The form is fascinating, giving the reader the feeling of a roller-coaster ride, which I'm sure is similar to the relationship itself. Wonderful job.
Ben Gieske
Welcome, always enjoyable reading a fresh voice. I like your poetic imagery.
Welcome, always enjoyable reading a fresh voice. I like your poetic imagery.
Meggie Gultiano
a beautiful piece..love it!!
a beautiful piece..love it!!
NadineM
Your poem is lovely. The lines: "This burning flame flickers like an oil-lamp that wanes but never quite dies out." seem to say it all, summarizing your lingering love and desire. Your thoughts are carefully and creatively expressed in your words. Well done!......Nadine
Your poem is lovely. The lines: "This burning flame flickers like an oil-lamp that wanes but never quite dies out." seem to say it all, summarizing your lingering love and desire. Your thoughts are carefully and creatively expressed in your words. Well done!......Nadine
PrEmJi PrEmJi
love, lust and life...
love, lust and life...
jadia4708au
you too were wonderful in dark night the path chosen was too very right a gentle touch could perform miracle there is not much to worry about full circle time may move on and you can rely rule if to be broken and defied i can be had in every object accept me in full and not reject
you too were wonderful in dark night the path chosen was too very right a gentle touch could perform miracle there is not much to worry about full circle time may move on and you can rely rule if to be broken and defied i can be had in every object accept me in full and not reject
Pendemic
I like your use of expression and the imagery in this delightful piece.
I like your use of expression and the imagery in this delightful piece.
Becky
"Nothing More..." but this is so much as everything... such a beautiful poem that to read brought me to such desperation of love...
"Nothing More..." but this is so much as everything... such a beautiful poem that to read brought me to such desperation of love...
tom balch
Beautiful poetry Aria, much enjoyed.
Beautiful poetry Aria, much enjoyed.
great