Rattled

He's using that damn
sanitizer cream again
as if mundane antibodies
are gonna trounce that rare
strain of Ebola his momma
told him would kill

everything he ever loved
unless he stopped touching
himself with those filthy hands
and thoughts most perverse
before tasting that sting of
soap through his tears.

Maybe that's how he
got that girlish lisp?

I’m too loud again.
Can’t discern the margins:
acceptable versus intolerable
inside these hollow, carpet
walls, enveloping me
in a cloying tomb

with the voices
of the anguished
spilling cloying accents
as annoying as my own
dulcimer waves
on infinite loop

advising to voices
busy in distractions
of fear with that mournful
quiver betraying the fact
they’d failed to catch
my nuanced charm.

twilights descent
wonderful use of language in general man- great

heather wilkins
great usage of mtaphors.

Grimm
You have such a wonderful, intense way with words, John. It's very appealing and quite capturing. Very powerful.

Pendemic
I keep saying this John, but your style never ceases to amaze me, your command over the words is powerful and it shows in each of your pieces.

Ron Peat
I love the metaphors in this poem they are spectacular. Powerful write. I'm bit jogged by the slip for 3rd person into fist in stanza 4 however. Personally I feel the poem would even be stronger in one voice without the shift. Just a thought. I really like your writing John and your comments that I picked up here and there. /very insightful. A poet friend//RH Peat

Frank James Ryan Jr./FjR
John, i've always enjoyed verse which challenges the readers own command of lexic prowess....be it abstruse vernacular, stymying underpinnings , or just out-right surreal & abstract tone...And you do this so well....which is why i look forward to spotting & reading you! ~FjR ~

vijay menon
Excellent