© RH Peat 1/10/2011
7 quatrains 28 lines
Metaphor Leaf as life‘s Journey

Abandon

Abandon

Falling—
A leaf floats
through the air—
turns, tumbles,

slips, and drops
to sleep gently
on the surface
of a pond.

Ripples
roll out within
widening circles.
In expanding waves

beyond control
the dream begins
to ride on its
glass reflection.

Silence
is that mirror
locked in stillness.
The quiet brook

flows slow toward
a new horizon—
motion is unseen
as its course shifts.

Renewed
the journey
embarks
outward into
the unknown.


© RH Peat 1/10/2011

Raju Baruah
well crafting verse....flows with a melody within..

Dorothy A. Holmes apwlts2
Beautifully structured...a sweet serenade! Dorothy A Poet Who Loves To Sing

sonetta
like a leaf that falls, we don't know where we'll land....we can make plans but which way the water flows or how the wind blows....who knows?

Kamala
The Metaphor well captured here. A rejuvenation of life.

Sylvia Marquetta
lovely poem.....I like the motion of movement from beginning to end at the simple drop of a leaf, exellent

Nikunj
from the ripples that are born within to an outbound journey , the poem opens new vistas of imagination for the readers ...yes we are like leaves in transition , at mercy of his winds ...

Ency Bearis
Impressive poem, such a wonderful thoughts of a journey.

Sandra Martyres
Brilliant write Ron, the journey of the leaf evokes many thoughts and ideas....

Debs
A beautiful picutre of different thoughts.

C. P. Sharma
profound in thought and romantic in imagery.