I wrote this at the beginning of summer, and this is one of the only pieces I actually edited after having written it. I asked teachers and poets and friends for constructive criticism (part of the influence for the title) until this came about. Not yet sure if I'm happy with it, but enjoy!
Destructive Criticism
You sit in your concrete boxes
clattering on your computers or cramming
crap down your throat refusing to chew or
forgetting to catch your breath
'cause time is cut short.
A leaf is rustled off its branch,
and floats gently through the air,
only to get trapped in the cogs of your life.
Error.
Error.
coax1965
Thanks Julia, I do enjoy discussing the interpretations of poems. I can see where you are coming from, you have expressed yourself well. It is a common theme that people question the progress of modern life. I am sure that "taking care to appreciate the little things" is evidence of a well balanced person.
Thanks Julia, I do enjoy discussing the interpretations of poems. I can see where you are coming from, you have expressed yourself well. It is a common theme that people question the progress of modern life. I am sure that "taking care to appreciate the little things" is evidence of a well balanced person.
JuliaFranke
coax - I wrote this poem aimed at the concrete lifestyle we have in our urban societies. It consists of working, stressing, and not taking care to appreciate the little things. Some people become robots. The second stanza is about nature, the simplicity yet beauty of it, and how we are destroying it. The title is a somewhat pun - this is constructive criticism towards the people, but the people are destructive, so I did a little word play :) PS: I normally don't give my own interpretations or meanings of poems away because I think it's important that everyone grasps their own essence from each word... so consider this an exception :)
coax - I wrote this poem aimed at the concrete lifestyle we have in our urban societies. It consists of working, stressing, and not taking care to appreciate the little things. Some people become robots. The second stanza is about nature, the simplicity yet beauty of it, and how we are destroying it. The title is a somewhat pun - this is constructive criticism towards the people, but the people are destructive, so I did a little word play :) PS: I normally don't give my own interpretations or meanings of poems away because I think it's important that everyone grasps their own essence from each word... so consider this an exception :)
coax1965
I am fascinated by this poem. I do not know if I understand it though. It seems to me to be about work. I have often criticised work destructively. It just seems like the appropriate thing to do sometimes. Maybe you had something else in mind.
I am fascinated by this poem. I do not know if I understand it though. It seems to me to be about work. I have often criticised work destructively. It just seems like the appropriate thing to do sometimes. Maybe you had something else in mind.
Paul Jackson
what kind of error? A computer always gives you a code. maybe a tongue in cheek thing? Really good poem!
what kind of error? A computer always gives you a code. maybe a tongue in cheek thing? Really good poem!
Ismael Iniguez
criticism is criticism , i guess people just try to make it positive... write and do anything in life with heart and don't be ashamed of it.. other peoples motives can be sheer jealousy or hatred, just trying to hold someone else down so they can be miserable like them... In art, who is to say your wrong... artists, writers, poets all should have a unique style that is their own, some may like it some may not...but its your work, be proud that you have the courage to express yourself, in a world where everyone is scare to do so..
criticism is criticism , i guess people just try to make it positive... write and do anything in life with heart and don't be ashamed of it.. other peoples motives can be sheer jealousy or hatred, just trying to hold someone else down so they can be miserable like them... In art, who is to say your wrong... artists, writers, poets all should have a unique style that is their own, some may like it some may not...but its your work, be proud that you have the courage to express yourself, in a world where everyone is scare to do so..
poeticpiers
Dare to Stand and stare not go rushing everywhere
Dare to Stand and stare not go rushing everywhere
Prince Obed de la CRUZ
destructive criticism should be stopped because through construction, we have something whether small or great but through destruction you make possible the absence of something that is already there. Destruction is only for the bad things.
destructive criticism should be stopped because through construction, we have something whether small or great but through destruction you make possible the absence of something that is already there. Destruction is only for the bad things.
Pendemic
I like this poem. It's amazing how people get so involved in their lives and feel they are ever important that the simplicity and importance of nature get forgotten. As poets we tend to stop and focus on the importance of everything. Well written.
I like this poem. It's amazing how people get so involved in their lives and feel they are ever important that the simplicity and importance of nature get forgotten. As poets we tend to stop and focus on the importance of everything. Well written.
Wonderful insight into an ever increasing problem Julia, well done. Fondly, Jerry