The Devil's Citadel
He builds
The walls
Of hell,
with bricks
Of love…
The Aching heart
lamenting
to her ecstatic
moves and audacious
grooves, he
Builds the
Walls of
Hell with
cement of
love...
Lovely
Greetings
Foiled with
Dizzy lullabies,
He sends her
His love,
a tiny drop
not spared ..
He sends
His love
and builds
doors to
the hell
love
given, donated
and cremated..
buried in her
rigid heart…
The foundation
laid..
no more
tears of love,
with aches
of irritation
and melancholic
frustration, he builds
walls of hell,
builds, builds
builds.. Now
it is a citadel,
his own castle...
the self inflicted,
fiendish, hellish castle
where he rules,
cries and do
his bidding
like the
Devil's Advocate
himself!!!!
pic from - http://www.flickr.com/photos/expressmonorail/2987525721/
Copyright 2010 Shashendra Amalshan
Looks like all the metaphors here come straight from Transylvania!!Even though there's no sign of blood anywhere into this finest verse, the entire work bleeds all the way..Very innovative as ever Shan...Devil rocks !! Great stuff dude.
Brrrrrrr this is creepy and builds your poetry to a finale to die for! Your repetition of "builds" is part of the reason, and this is one of the reasons why your brilliant crafting stands you apart from others. It's about time I wrote something chilling...
Wow! Superbly penned and powerful piece... The use of repetition of key sinister phrases lent much impact
Excellent! Shan brother could you please guide me there to work in the Citadel as I am fluent in his dialect?
good imaginative work...the image there is superb- wonderfully compliments the devil theme inside
the devil's love...your way with words is so effortless in this piece
Shan, you have an amazing way with words - this poem is truly imaginative and very well pieced together...keeps the reader enthralled from the word go.....TFS Sandra
You fit your words together like a linguistic jigsaw puzzle to create the most original picture, Shan, in a style all of your own. A marvel! :)
Powerful, well-thought, deep write Shash... Takes right from start to the end, without a break...
Wow! The tempter and tormentor wrapped into one. I see the drug dealer, the pimp, the slaver...all three in this poem, which gives me chills. Powerful write.
Another poem of vigor, strength and pure energy, Shash...Simple but power-packed lines: He sends His love and builds doors to the hell
i loved this piece, a work of talent to be sure!