Tragedy of a commodity
She is a commodity
Without fidelity
And morality
In this carnal society
She works without sanity
To earn few pennies
Oh,wretched wench
Lost her virginity....
By fallacy and levity
Of her age,
Could not tame
Her stupidity
But proceeded
To appease the lechery
And cupidity of men
In the world of vapidity
My eyes met her
Body of willowy on
A street of the city.....
Which shattered my celibacy
But,aroused the gravity....
Twenty minutes passed
With extreme fantasy
At last slaked my lunacy
Stood up and left her
With a memory....
Huh,it was the power of
my lubricity
Walked back to my dwelling
And saw my lovely family,
Realm of my tranquillity
Then lay on the settee
And began to think of her
Tragedy............
Alison Cassidy
There is something very lyrical about the language you've used in your poem which contrasts ironically with the starkness of its theme. Commodity, fidelity, morality, society, vapidity, fluidity, willowy, celibacy, gravity, fantasy, lunacy, lubricity, tranquility - Tragedy. Pretty words grace the page as tears fall from the reader's eyes. Compelling poem. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
There is something very lyrical about the language you've used in your poem which contrasts ironically with the starkness of its theme. Commodity, fidelity, morality, society, vapidity, fluidity, willowy, celibacy, gravity, fantasy, lunacy, lubricity, tranquility - Tragedy. Pretty words grace the page as tears fall from the reader's eyes. Compelling poem. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
anushmadhu
hi it is good write up.interesting..congraTS
hi it is good write up.interesting..congraTS
Raj Arumugam
A powerful poem, Punsara...Like the persona in this poem, I have never judged these women. They are just as human as anyone else and society should take as much blame as it often puts on them. A good poem that holds up the mirror to society.
A powerful poem, Punsara...Like the persona in this poem, I have never judged these women. They are just as human as anyone else and society should take as much blame as it often puts on them. A good poem that holds up the mirror to society.
robyn selters
Rather much the way it goes... Using a woman when he has a lovely family... and not grasping the tragic background inherent for many 'ladies of the night' who were broken in through abuse and incest... You wrote with much insight...
Rather much the way it goes... Using a woman when he has a lovely family... and not grasping the tragic background inherent for many 'ladies of the night' who were broken in through abuse and incest... You wrote with much insight...
adooo, this has to be the best poem you have written up to date.. Here, not bluffing or exaggerating, this really is a good poem.. the poem is very touching and poignant, at the same time, it also carries a very strong message. Keep it up, you write better than most people out there!! cheers !!!