3000 Leagues to 30 Thousand Feet
I functioned
3000 leagues under the sea
in the murky water
on the bottom
of the deep
is where you found me.
Going blithely by
with my blue complexion
behaving like never breathing
was natural.
The turbid life was all I knew......
......until I met you.
Then you rushed down
put on my air supply,
it was there always
I just could not see
through my clinched tight
third eye.
You gave me the first
real air
I had ever breathed
It went right to my soul,
reinflated me.
When we surfaced
you taught me how to fly
We soar now
in the clouds
sometimes on number nine,
often even higher,
but whos counting
altiitude or time?
Chaos1214
Ha ha Sandra Dodd 1.0 got herself a serious upgrade. And, man, is she happy with it : D
Ha ha Sandra Dodd 1.0 got herself a serious upgrade. And, man, is she happy with it : D
hitesh pincha
THE BEST ONE...I HAVE COME ACROSS TILL DATE IN POETFREAK......SO LIVELY, SO IMAGINATIVE....SUPERLIKE ....GOOD WORK!!!
THE BEST ONE...I HAVE COME ACROSS TILL DATE IN POETFREAK......SO LIVELY, SO IMAGINATIVE....SUPERLIKE ....GOOD WORK!!!
Ken e Hall
Sometimes an original poem that stands by its self, a one off ,well this is surely that one 'on cloud nine, thanks for this...regards
Sometimes an original poem that stands by its self, a one off ,well this is surely that one 'on cloud nine, thanks for this...regards
Ron Peat
A great poem Ms. Dodd. Remarkable joy is found within the words. /// Cumulous Nine// Tell me where did cloud nine / in its heavenly blue brine arrive/ from within its luminous dreamy / sky? It makes me cry a lttle sigh. / I've searched the depth of sea. / But no one can tell ,you or me / when or where, how or why. / Yet cloud nine came just the same— / like they say, it found its way. / A periscope went up from some / great depth and across the ocean's / wide width we’re swept, and suddenly / we have that pillowy cloud nine. / and now, somehow, everyone says:/ “I want one, to be all mine." / They’ve discovered the moment / so rare that holds a universe bare; / its like finding the truth, like love / its all of life pulling its first tooth. /// © RH Peat 1/15/2011 2:47pm/ form: stichic. 19 lines/ metaphor: cloud nine is finding love. /
A great poem Ms. Dodd. Remarkable joy is found within the words. /// Cumulous Nine// Tell me where did cloud nine / in its heavenly blue brine arrive/ from within its luminous dreamy / sky? It makes me cry a lttle sigh. / I've searched the depth of sea. / But no one can tell ,you or me / when or where, how or why. / Yet cloud nine came just the same— / like they say, it found its way. / A periscope went up from some / great depth and across the ocean's / wide width we’re swept, and suddenly / we have that pillowy cloud nine. / and now, somehow, everyone says:/ “I want one, to be all mine." / They’ve discovered the moment / so rare that holds a universe bare; / its like finding the truth, like love / its all of life pulling its first tooth. /// © RH Peat 1/15/2011 2:47pm/ form: stichic. 19 lines/ metaphor: cloud nine is finding love. /
Alison Cassidy
Redemption expressed with wonderful metaphoric skill (and a stunning accompanying image too!). Your final line adds a very human touch to one of your most uplifting poems to date. Welcome back. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
Redemption expressed with wonderful metaphoric skill (and a stunning accompanying image too!). Your final line adds a very human touch to one of your most uplifting poems to date. Welcome back. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
wombat
Simply stunning!
Simply stunning!
T A Ramesh
Indeed it reminds me of James Bond movie! Nice one!
Indeed it reminds me of James Bond movie! Nice one!
Pendemic
Brought to mind that Chicago song "You're the inspiration" Very positive and hopeful write, loved this!
Brought to mind that Chicago song "You're the inspiration" Very positive and hopeful write, loved this!
Dr.subhendu kar
yet one of the most eclectic verses i have ever read , really wonder awes when soaring high spumes of white when touches moon time and space when preen to glow of universe breath seems to rips through being inflated light of love dissipates enlightening heart reels through resonance emblazoned soul seems to sip nectar of heaven completeness rejoices in deep blithe of smile
yet one of the most eclectic verses i have ever read , really wonder awes when soaring high spumes of white when touches moon time and space when preen to glow of universe breath seems to rips through being inflated light of love dissipates enlightening heart reels through resonance emblazoned soul seems to sip nectar of heaven completeness rejoices in deep blithe of smile
jinjahman
Beautiful low-to-high imagery, and romantic too. Excellent!
Beautiful low-to-high imagery, and romantic too. Excellent!
SHRIDHAR B S
Fantastic verse.. altitude or time.
Fantastic verse.. altitude or time.
Ency Bearis
Awesome ! Such a wonderful verses in high tone of ecstasy
Awesome ! Such a wonderful verses in high tone of ecstasy
carol
amazing sandra i am soaring too
amazing sandra i am soaring too
Fay Slimm
A fantastic verse Sandra - - I was flying there with you all the way - - this has to be one of your best. It gives positive vibes from the first line til the last. Great to have you here posting again.
A fantastic verse Sandra - - I was flying there with you all the way - - this has to be one of your best. It gives positive vibes from the first line til the last. Great to have you here posting again.
Beautiful tribute to your love!