Obsolescence: The state of being which occurs when a person, object or service is no longer wanted.
Images of Obsolescence
Discarded detritus from deceased estates
waiting to be priced
or sent to the tip.
Faded boxes of once upon a time,
their fixed faces
forever smiling.
Battered bodies that lovers once bonked in
dumped at the wrecker
to pick over for parts.
Idle hands on rug-covered knees
sitting in rows
waiting for dinner.
eleanor prince
It hits home. The last stanza completes a brilliant picture of what has been lost and is the present reality.
It hits home. The last stanza completes a brilliant picture of what has been lost and is the present reality.
Raj Arumugam
Item 3 here is my favorite! Very creative and insightful, Alison...
Item 3 here is my favorite! Very creative and insightful, Alison...
Munia Khan
The title itself is a masterpiece here ..We simply can't imagine such images if not creative mind like you leads us to...This is just awesome Allie...One of your best creations according to me.Love this so much.
The title itself is a masterpiece here ..We simply can't imagine such images if not creative mind like you leads us to...This is just awesome Allie...One of your best creations according to me.Love this so much.
Karin Anderson
And stark and pitiful images they are Alison conjured up from your brilliant mind. The alliteration in your first line gives the first image great impact and "battered bodies that lovers once bonked" equally as impressive. Sadly, the last one is so very common as the elderly live longer now and if we visit in nursing homes this is what we see! Alas, these images do exist and you captured them so well!
And stark and pitiful images they are Alison conjured up from your brilliant mind. The alliteration in your first line gives the first image great impact and "battered bodies that lovers once bonked" equally as impressive. Sadly, the last one is so very common as the elderly live longer now and if we visit in nursing homes this is what we see! Alas, these images do exist and you captured them so well!
Susan Jarvis
Adeptly crafted stanzas graced with literary device and vivid imagery...but when the images of objects give way to the stark scene of 'Idle hands on rug-covered knees' this poem taps into the emotions and tugs at the heart taking the whole piece to a new level; poignant and perfect. :)
Adeptly crafted stanzas graced with literary device and vivid imagery...but when the images of objects give way to the stark scene of 'Idle hands on rug-covered knees' this poem taps into the emotions and tugs at the heart taking the whole piece to a new level; poignant and perfect. :)
Leslie Alexis
I like the form. best
I like the form. best
Punsara
Yu have not taken more words to express your deep poetic feelings,but these few lines penetrated my heart......A unique poem......!
Yu have not taken more words to express your deep poetic feelings,but these few lines penetrated my heart......A unique poem......!
sonetta
a sad display of things deemed useless...the last category tugs at the heart....
a sad display of things deemed useless...the last category tugs at the heart....
Don
No wonder the aged live in memories, and the young try to recall their elders in their virile days.... Good imagery here.
No wonder the aged live in memories, and the young try to recall their elders in their virile days.... Good imagery here.
humanwoman
this is just so intricate and it's simplicity is decieving
this is just so intricate and it's simplicity is decieving
nimal dunuhinga
The bitter truth of out of date faces and their reality Your obliging precious camera caught skilfully the close-ups, Well done! Alison you could see me too on rug-covered knees sitting in rows waiting for dinner?
The bitter truth of out of date faces and their reality Your obliging precious camera caught skilfully the close-ups, Well done! Alison you could see me too on rug-covered knees sitting in rows waiting for dinner?
Kerry O'Connor
Your use of alliteration brought every stanza alive in a very special way. Each portrait of obsolescence is written with an unerring eye for detail and the last, of course, goes straight for the heart.
Your use of alliteration brought every stanza alive in a very special way. Each portrait of obsolescence is written with an unerring eye for detail and the last, of course, goes straight for the heart.
john o'connell
an awfully painful truth! well captured and well written. tfs.. kind regards, john
an awfully painful truth! well captured and well written. tfs.. kind regards, john
PrEmJi PrEmJi
horrifying images..... sad it is reality........
horrifying images..... sad it is reality........
Fay Slimm
An awesomely vivid painting which hits hard Allie - - well phrased with carefully chosen imagery which brings home the reality. Sad but so true.
An awesomely vivid painting which hits hard Allie - - well phrased with carefully chosen imagery which brings home the reality. Sad but so true.
Sandra Martyres
Your stunning imagery in this poignant poem is truly the work of a word artist. Lovely poem Allie..TFS
Your stunning imagery in this poignant poem is truly the work of a word artist. Lovely poem Allie..TFS
Mike
Such a sad feeling this wonderful work conjures up...
Such a sad feeling this wonderful work conjures up...
robyn selters
Wow! You have captured this concept so adroitly.
Wow! You have captured this concept so adroitly.
anushmadhu
Images of obsolescences...........fantastic write ups... I like these lines too .;....Faded boxes of once upon a time with fixed faces forever smiling.. poetic lines
Images of obsolescences...........fantastic write ups... I like these lines too .;....Faded boxes of once upon a time with fixed faces forever smiling.. poetic lines
love it!!!