Your sweet golden notes penetrate my soul.
They strike life's tone-deaf bowl
of plaintive tunes, and replay
inaudible sounds by injecting a warm dose
of chords as an amorous goal.
Let who will condemn, we sing life our way.
Yet bittersweet, but one day
this chorus of repeated
yearning will vocalise loudly and relay
unfinished music for life to play.
When fleshed, ardent desire will be sated.
Destiny's fire will have abated
off-beat keys, complete and bonded
forever we will harmonise then, created
the better for having waited.
Published 2010/07/26, write a comment
this is great..and i love your rhyme too. A perfect piece.
Well written and full of timeless wisdom. Reads like one of the classics...
wonderfuk-masterpiece of a song
Glorious poetry Fay, as music and poetry go are part of each other. A profound poem where destiny and harmony will be done. Your rhyme scheme os very effective too!
RAJ NANDY
Truly lifes music goes on unbated ! "When fleshed , our ardent desire will be sated." A great philosophical & poetic expression well expressed ! -Raj
a pleasure to read. its filled with really strong words. - Jay -
Strongly focused with great rhythm and sense of color.