Lost Within Words.
We lived through a blaze of debate-soaked dreams
with off-the-cuff meetings of minds.
We gazed at cut-priced layers of ideas, like scenes
in some drama of obscure meaning.
It all went into the melting pot, as wide-eyed
we arranged our brave new worlds.
We talked ourselves into the ground but not trying
to learn to have fun when we danced
We got lost within words, and their ultimate sound
drowned out our heart's final chance.
Shall we reconstruct silence to give love one last twirl ?
Karin Anderson
So eloquently presented Fay and what did it for me was 'not trying to learn to have fun when wqe danced'. Lost between words drowning heart's final chance really hits the mark They say silence can be golden and I would say yes too! Wonderful wonderful imagery!
So eloquently presented Fay and what did it for me was 'not trying to learn to have fun when wqe danced'. Lost between words drowning heart's final chance really hits the mark They say silence can be golden and I would say yes too! Wonderful wonderful imagery!
Jayaruwan
listen to the silent voice. maybe that's why they contain the same letters. I just loved the poem. broke it into pieces, enjoyed each and every word separately, put them together, read it from beginning to end and from end to the beginning. then I got lost within words.
listen to the silent voice. maybe that's why they contain the same letters. I just loved the poem. broke it into pieces, enjoyed each and every word separately, put them together, read it from beginning to end and from end to the beginning. then I got lost within words.
Susan Jarvis
The title speaks volumes, and I love those; 'off-the-cuff meetings of minds', but the closing line steals the show. A linguistic delight with a heart-touching message. :)
The title speaks volumes, and I love those; 'off-the-cuff meetings of minds', but the closing line steals the show. A linguistic delight with a heart-touching message. :)
Scarlett Angel
Words are the weapon of choice...they can bring pleasure or cut down...this is an excellent piece Fay :)
Words are the weapon of choice...they can bring pleasure or cut down...this is an excellent piece Fay :)
wojja fink
Yes, yes and yes, you've said it all in the stunner of a last line.
Yes, yes and yes, you've said it all in the stunner of a last line.
RAJ NANDY
FAY , I am really amazed as to how you churn out such beautiful lines , must be the sublime mind , of a gifted poet like you ! While many shoot off just two /three lines, thinking as poetry that would do ! Thank you ! -Raj
FAY , I am really amazed as to how you churn out such beautiful lines , must be the sublime mind , of a gifted poet like you ! While many shoot off just two /three lines, thinking as poetry that would do ! Thank you ! -Raj
Raj Arumugam
your recent poems show a new style you seem to be adopting...I like this prose-verse style; it has a certain ease and eloquence...
your recent poems show a new style you seem to be adopting...I like this prose-verse style; it has a certain ease and eloquence...
carol
lovely fay i say oh yes
lovely fay i say oh yes
Sandra Martyres
"We lived through a blaze of debated-soaked dreams" I love the opening lines of this thought provoking write- Fay you have excelled once again in raising a very pertinent question at the end too..."Shall we reconstruct silence to give love one last twirl ?" Indeed we are generally lost within words...
"We lived through a blaze of debated-soaked dreams" I love the opening lines of this thought provoking write- Fay you have excelled once again in raising a very pertinent question at the end too..."Shall we reconstruct silence to give love one last twirl ?" Indeed we are generally lost within words...
Nikunj
so emotional and so very well crafted . Your phrases provide and amazing sheen to the verses and the meaning. Soaking dreams with off the cuff meeting of minds ..how thoughtful this is ...wow. Not trying to learn to have fun ..... this is what life is all about , not realising the value of something when in hand .... the last three verses are priceless ...to be treasured in mind and embraced whole heartedly ...
so emotional and so very well crafted . Your phrases provide and amazing sheen to the verses and the meaning. Soaking dreams with off the cuff meeting of minds ..how thoughtful this is ...wow. Not trying to learn to have fun ..... this is what life is all about , not realising the value of something when in hand .... the last three verses are priceless ...to be treasured in mind and embraced whole heartedly ...
T A Ramesh
Talking while dancing cannot be interesting in the noise of blaring music! Silence is indeed needed!
Talking while dancing cannot be interesting in the noise of blaring music! Silence is indeed needed!
Faye...this is so beautiful..if i write anything else..it would be just an echo of all our friends here...kudos.This goes to my bookmarks.love,Sri.