Naked
You dressed me
in devotion
draped me in the silk
of soft seduction
You wrapped me up
in passion
swathed my soul
in sighs of adoration
Yet that veil
of love I’d worn
was woven with fine threads
of pure delusion
Now tattered
stained and torn
the pledge that you had sworn
just lust’s illusion.
dahlusion
A well written piece of mature and seasoned words that thread together the imagery needed to complete it. I love this phrase: "soft seduction" bravo!!!!!!! peace and light, dah
A well written piece of mature and seasoned words that thread together the imagery needed to complete it. I love this phrase: "soft seduction" bravo!!!!!!! peace and light, dah
york2frisco
I've come late to discover this precious poem. It speaks of universal delusions and disillusions experienced at one time or another by all who dare to "look". The last line raises this piece from a "somebody did somebody wrong" song to a bitter-sweet shared experience that may help both parties avoid similar pitfalls in the future. Beautifully written.
I've come late to discover this precious poem. It speaks of universal delusions and disillusions experienced at one time or another by all who dare to "look". The last line raises this piece from a "somebody did somebody wrong" song to a bitter-sweet shared experience that may help both parties avoid similar pitfalls in the future. Beautifully written.
Frank James Ryan Jr./FjR
Now, how the 'ell did i miss this primo simpatico paragon of poetics ? ! Awesome....so very captive....and the digital does not do it any harm, either !lol! Excellent Work, Missy S. ! ~FjR ~
Now, how the 'ell did i miss this primo simpatico paragon of poetics ? ! Awesome....so very captive....and the digital does not do it any harm, either !lol! Excellent Work, Missy S. ! ~FjR ~
Keith Robinson
Truth is sometimes the bitterest of friends...
Truth is sometimes the bitterest of friends...
stephen
sooo amazing. well written, well said and wow, just wow.
sooo amazing. well written, well said and wow, just wow.
Sana Rose
This a beautiful thought of realization presented in perfect rhyme, Sue... Loved this! Tfs!
This a beautiful thought of realization presented in perfect rhyme, Sue... Loved this! Tfs!
john o'connell
without mincing words an excellent poem! tfs.. john
without mincing words an excellent poem! tfs.. john
Dorothy A. Holmes apwlts2
I could not have said it better! My mother use to say "Things that hurt instruct!" ...Your poetic voice is wonderfully expressed...I hope this made you stronger... Dorothy A Poet Who Loves To Sing
I could not have said it better! My mother use to say "Things that hurt instruct!" ...Your poetic voice is wonderfully expressed...I hope this made you stronger... Dorothy A Poet Who Loves To Sing
ShyWolf
A fine line between love and lust - another gem in your crown for this excellent write
A fine line between love and lust - another gem in your crown for this excellent write
cjkrieger
Susan... you just blew me away with this poem. One of the best I have read on this site... I must read more of your work.
Susan... you just blew me away with this poem. One of the best I have read on this site... I must read more of your work.
poeticpiers
were you fooled or did you fool yourself?
were you fooled or did you fool yourself?
Kerry O'Connor
A wonderfully adept use of extended metaphor.
A wonderfully adept use of extended metaphor.
Valhjim
Very well-crafted poem. The imagery and rhymes in the first part enhance the music of passion and adoration. The second stanza utilizes fewer rhymes, which help the development of its antithetical theme--a perfect and unexpected closure to an excellent write! Beautiful jewel! Thanks for sharing!
Very well-crafted poem. The imagery and rhymes in the first part enhance the music of passion and adoration. The second stanza utilizes fewer rhymes, which help the development of its antithetical theme--a perfect and unexpected closure to an excellent write! Beautiful jewel! Thanks for sharing!
Pendemic
Tis a shame so many mistake lust for true love. This is a well written piece that many should read.
Tis a shame so many mistake lust for true love. This is a well written piece that many should read.
sonetta
this is simply delicious...until the second verse when it turns bitter!!
this is simply delicious...until the second verse when it turns bitter!!
Ernestine Northover
Beautifully described. A parcel of lovely words, woven with skill and great thought.
Beautifully described. A parcel of lovely words, woven with skill and great thought.
Mark L. Berryann
Lost love captured powerfully, tragically!
Lost love captured powerfully, tragically!
Munia Khan
I have never known before that lust can be so beautifully decorated.....The word 'Naked' can be used in such a holy way full of love and art!!!! What can I say now Susan? My soul starts dancing naked.... now that I have read this wonderful work over n over again :-)
I have never known before that lust can be so beautifully decorated.....The word 'Naked' can be used in such a holy way full of love and art!!!! What can I say now Susan? My soul starts dancing naked.... now that I have read this wonderful work over n over again :-)
erik99
How true, and how beautifully expressed. Lust and fantasy will carry even the best of us to places we would better not go, under the guise of Love.
How true, and how beautifully expressed. Lust and fantasy will carry even the best of us to places we would better not go, under the guise of Love.
Mike
I agree with Fay, an x-ray of the heart, filled with love, promises and even lust and sometimes it all falls down... beautiful...
I agree with Fay, an x-ray of the heart, filled with love, promises and even lust and sometimes it all falls down... beautiful...
Fay Slimm
Agree with NIks - - powerful indeed and strong with emotion... another fantastically good write that takes the heart apart.
Agree with NIks - - powerful indeed and strong with emotion... another fantastically good write that takes the heart apart.
carol
susan a delight to read this morning
susan a delight to read this morning
Nikunj
this is powerful and rhythmic like a new song that captures the heart , wonderful phrases and a message that stands out ....good one yet again ...
this is powerful and rhythmic like a new song that captures the heart , wonderful phrases and a message that stands out ....good one yet again ...
Sandra Martyres
You uncover lust's illusion so effectively in this well written piece..... in the true Susan style
You uncover lust's illusion so effectively in this well written piece..... in the true Susan style
Philip
Oh my goodness ! Just having breakfast...No way to view a Poetess.... Lucky my eyes are closed to the vision but open to the words...Which are Beautiful. Thank you dear .....Susan ...Get dressed now dear...Your shivering . let me cover you up with the blessings of mine and our mutual friends.... Philip
Oh my goodness ! Just having breakfast...No way to view a Poetess.... Lucky my eyes are closed to the vision but open to the words...Which are Beautiful. Thank you dear .....Susan ...Get dressed now dear...Your shivering . let me cover you up with the blessings of mine and our mutual friends.... Philip
I will read this again and again because it's perfect. A qua.