This is my first poem ever.

Walking Behind a Shadow

Who marches there?
With wings so rare,
Did you see the glare?
Does anyone care?

They are the diseased…
For they plead to cease…
They are the suppressed…
For they fail to impress…

Betrayed by the religion…
Dominated by the culture…
Trapped within an illusion…
For they are the future…

Did you see the glare?
Does anyone care?

Copyright © Jayaruwan Gunathilake - All rights reserved

 

Mark L. Berryann
Having been your first stab at poetry, your successful future is evident in the unique delivery of your message. Good luck!

nimal dunuhinga
Shadows of deep souls.............first poem of a matured!

Louis Rams
very well written my brother, for you have gotten deep down under. you see with a fresh pair of eyes, of that i can't deny.

Leslie Alexis
the poem comes from an observant eye. the third stanza is my favorite.

magnolia
well done on your first poem, a pleasure to read. Maggie x

carol
welcome and a great poem too

Shashendra Amalshan
Hello, Welcome to poetfreak bro... And what a thought provoking poem you have written. I am sure you will find thousands of people who would care and welcome you with warm arms. Please do keep on writing.. Wish that your stay at poetfreak will turn out to be a long one:)

Fay Slimm
This is a first rate message and poetically written in a fresh and imaginative way - I enjoyed the read.... well done the first poem Jay - -and welcome to Poet Freak - - keep writing - best wisehs from Fay.....

Sandra Martyres
Great start into the world of poetry..I wish you all the best...