How could I deserve you - Sonnet

How could I deserve you in any way,
Who makes my heart twirl like a strong windmill;
Grinding, grinding off edges of the day,
Making small gemstone fragments of my will.

All my hours become treasured, and a gift,
Imagining I tread sunny fields alone;
With every thought of you to give a lift,
And know with you, my heart is always home.

Why me; why now, am I the deserving one,
Should live my life as queen, albeit uncrowned?
I chase your shadow toward the setting sun-
And pray in future sunsets, I might drown.

A sun and moon, with you inside my arms:
The world's reborn, there's none can come to harm.

 

poeticpiers
great use of the form. Subject material well chosen.

Chisom Okafor
Yeah. Well structured. Just like those of Shakespare. Perfect work.

 

poeticpiers
Perhaps because it was written in the stars

Mike
I love this beautiful sonnet... the form is so perfect for these words of love...

Leslie Alexis
I like what Ivor said.. " love laughs at logic"...

 

poeticpiers
why question ?just accept/ love laughs at logic

Ron Cole
This is delightful! I especially liked: "Why me; why now, am I the deserving one, Should live my life as queen, albeit uncrowned? I chase your shadow toward the setting sun- And pray in future sunsets, I might drown" Nice work!

john o'connell
love this wonderful sonnet full of good content and an abundance of craftmanship.

Kerry O'Connor
A modern sonnet delivered with consummate skill.

kath
This is a poem to sigh to Patti! my favourite verse is the second - it spoke straight to my heart! the whole sonnet is a thing of delicate beauty - and so precious for its' rarity! Thank you for such a wonderful demonstration of your unique talents. kath :) xxxxxxxxxx

Keith Robinson
Love the windmill blades comparison.

yelena
The last lines made me feel like flying in some sunlit euphoric space..Absolutely amazing, Patti.

carol
patti amazing you are bookmarking