Married to a Piranha
He is
But a
Deceitful
Piranha……
Dressed in
A Dolphin’s
Tuxedo, closing
On his newly
Wedded
Prey
Oozing
Venom with
His Charismatic
Smiles and
Poisonous
Wiles, raping
Her untainted
Heart and milky
Bosom with
his tainted
Fangs
Her
Wedding
Eve turned
To a bloodbath
Of grief, as
She lay helpless
In bed, naked
soaked with Bloody
Leeches, Her
Unstained
Wedding Gown
Disdained
And molested
With his
Deceitful
Limbs
She
Lays
Begging
And praying
To the maker,
Gazing at stars
With her frozen
Eyes glued to
The bluish Heavens,
As if to feel
The Fragrance Of
A flowery Divorce
Certificate will
Kiss her
molested
Feet…
Copyright Shashendra Amalshan 2010
Simply Bono Razek
my heart cries cuz my mind paints a picture of pain
my heart cries cuz my mind paints a picture of pain
Sana Rose
Incredible imagery and biting truth in this....stunning..
Incredible imagery and biting truth in this....stunning..
PrEmJi PrEmJi
this is the subtle truth... almost every marriage in the world face this same reality. almost all arranged marriages are mere rapes. marriage life starting from a rape!
this is the subtle truth... almost every marriage in the world face this same reality. almost all arranged marriages are mere rapes. marriage life starting from a rape!
Bob Blackwell
You have written a strong narrative of abuse with vivid metaphors. How any man can abuse his wife is something I find very hard to understand. Well done Shan.
You have written a strong narrative of abuse with vivid metaphors. How any man can abuse his wife is something I find very hard to understand. Well done Shan.
Sandra Martyres
"a Deceitful Piranha…… Dressed in A Dolphin’s Tuxedo" Your imagery is first class....another amazing write...that keeps the reader engaged till the very last word...
"a Deceitful Piranha…… Dressed in A Dolphin’s Tuxedo" Your imagery is first class....another amazing write...that keeps the reader engaged till the very last word...
wojja fink
I'm stunned reading these poems Shan, they're brilliant, so luminous with life!!
I'm stunned reading these poems Shan, they're brilliant, so luminous with life!!
Susan Jarvis
This had me gripped from the fantastic; 'He is But a Deceitful Piranha…… Dressed in A Dolphin’s Tuxedo' until the wonderful closing lines. A triumph of a poem, Shan :)
This had me gripped from the fantastic; 'He is But a Deceitful Piranha…… Dressed in A Dolphin’s Tuxedo' until the wonderful closing lines. A triumph of a poem, Shan :)
lady grace
is this a marriage without love?...hmmm,the presentation is nice...
is this a marriage without love?...hmmm,the presentation is nice...
Melvina
I love the form and your ability to present such wonderful imagery.
I love the form and your ability to present such wonderful imagery.
Raj Arumugam
What a powerful and accomplished portrait of (a loveless) marriage as seen through the eyes of the woman in such a loveless arrangement... And the imagery is so dynamic as some of your readers have pointed out and the language fluent and flowing....A strong poem. I've bookmarked this.
What a powerful and accomplished portrait of (a loveless) marriage as seen through the eyes of the woman in such a loveless arrangement... And the imagery is so dynamic as some of your readers have pointed out and the language fluent and flowing....A strong poem. I've bookmarked this.
Ken e Hall
Your uncanny cleverness turning oh such a night int0 a piranha blood bath leaves the reader feeling you carve out the words from your wonder library thats in you head,looking forward to all your work posted here, I know you are single so I hope you dont' meet any piranha women ooooo...regards
Your uncanny cleverness turning oh such a night int0 a piranha blood bath leaves the reader feeling you carve out the words from your wonder library thats in you head,looking forward to all your work posted here, I know you are single so I hope you dont' meet any piranha women ooooo...regards
Louis Rams
shan ! you have come back like the piranha that i know. you eat up everything around and show the skeltons of where you have been, which is your trademark. leaving everyone in awe and amazement. my compliments my little brother.
shan ! you have come back like the piranha that i know. you eat up everything around and show the skeltons of where you have been, which is your trademark. leaving everyone in awe and amazement. my compliments my little brother.
Alison Cassidy
The short sentences accentuate the fast pace of this poem - delivered at high intensity and with an extravagance that would make Edgar Allan Poe stretch his eyes. Your tuxedoed piranha has all the terrifying viciousness of a Grand Guignol villain and I can almost hear the audience 'booing' as the helpless maiden is ravished and abandoned - bloodstained and broken. I like your 'bluish Heavens and 'flowery Divorce Certificate' too. Excellent poem. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
The short sentences accentuate the fast pace of this poem - delivered at high intensity and with an extravagance that would make Edgar Allan Poe stretch his eyes. Your tuxedoed piranha has all the terrifying viciousness of a Grand Guignol villain and I can almost hear the audience 'booing' as the helpless maiden is ravished and abandoned - bloodstained and broken. I like your 'bluish Heavens and 'flowery Divorce Certificate' too. Excellent poem. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
Karin Anderson
As usual Shash your writing is brilliant using imagery that others may not dare to use. I like the way the poem reads down the page, so the reader's eyes rest on the words and take in the power of this poem more slowly than they otherwise would. As Fay says it is a disturbing poem and I agree as it violates a woman's freedom and expectations of what a marriage should be. Her wedding eve is one hell of a nightmare as the Piranha groom turns her night into a disaster. Lets hope her maker rescues her and hey! wouldn't this make a great sequel for this poem. For something positive to come out of something so negative. You could be the Knight in Shining Armor. Excellent writing Shash!
As usual Shash your writing is brilliant using imagery that others may not dare to use. I like the way the poem reads down the page, so the reader's eyes rest on the words and take in the power of this poem more slowly than they otherwise would. As Fay says it is a disturbing poem and I agree as it violates a woman's freedom and expectations of what a marriage should be. Her wedding eve is one hell of a nightmare as the Piranha groom turns her night into a disaster. Lets hope her maker rescues her and hey! wouldn't this make a great sequel for this poem. For something positive to come out of something so negative. You could be the Knight in Shining Armor. Excellent writing Shash!
Leslie Alexis
hmmm.. it seems about rape of something of the sort. The air in this poem is fitting for the meaning it holds.
hmmm.. it seems about rape of something of the sort. The air in this poem is fitting for the meaning it holds.
sonetta
a sad picture of a marriage doomed from the start....surely sex without love is tantamount to rape..
a sad picture of a marriage doomed from the start....surely sex without love is tantamount to rape..
Munia Khan
I love the metaphor here dear Shan and I can relate to every word.hmmmm...very wonderfully written for sure.Especially - The Fragrance Of A flowery Divorce Certificate will Kiss her molested Feet… These words are brilliant...I am in awe.Well done my friend !!
I love the metaphor here dear Shan and I can relate to every word.hmmmm...very wonderfully written for sure.Especially - The Fragrance Of A flowery Divorce Certificate will Kiss her molested Feet… These words are brilliant...I am in awe.Well done my friend !!
Keith Robinson
There are those whose arrogance is violent. Domestic betrayal and abuse is among the most heinous.
There are those whose arrogance is violent. Domestic betrayal and abuse is among the most heinous.
Fay Slimm
A vivid portrait of the Piranha-type groom desiccating his untainted new wife - - this is a thoughtful and heartfelt outcry against usage of female position in many arrangements and thank you for versing this disturbing subject Shan.
A vivid portrait of the Piranha-type groom desiccating his untainted new wife - - this is a thoughtful and heartfelt outcry against usage of female position in many arrangements and thank you for versing this disturbing subject Shan.
What a brilliant write this one is WOW!