“The Dying Day”
The dying yesterday tries to survive
Under the wings of its own despondence
But the joy of today still here alive
With its last vapour of faith to condense
And tomorrow’s sparkle now starts to gleam
For a painted vase holds the day that’s gone
As stars grasp the sky bathing in new beam
The dying past weeps forgetting the dawn
No shadow to haunt those shadowy days
Of that forgotten path no more dreaming
The faded last hours darken their ways
For the blues of heaven now start screaming
The dying day summons- farewell of pain
When clouds of hope bring days full of rain
Written on the afternoon 15th June,2010
©Munia Khan 2010
Dorothy A. Holmes apwlts2
Sooooooo beautiful! A joy to read. Dorothy A Poet Who Loves To Sing
Sooooooo beautiful! A joy to read. Dorothy A Poet Who Loves To Sing
Jenny Gordon
Beautiful and delightfully laden with such wonderful imagery, so fascinating thereby! I love it, half-intrigued!
Beautiful and delightfully laden with such wonderful imagery, so fascinating thereby! I love it, half-intrigued!
poetwithcancer
One of the things I discovered on this site is that there are many truly good poets here, and quite a few who write poems from time to time that show they are great poets. Consequently, I have a hard time deciding which poems to comment on. I only have a limited amount of energy and time, and I cannot comment on anywhere near the number I wish I could. // If I could only comment on one poem this month, the month of April--which is poetry month, as well as the birthday month for both me and my mother--this would be it. // This is a true "little sound"--technically or artistically well-crafted, and full of meaning, music, imagery, and emotion. Every line is a gem. For example: "The dying past weeps forgetting the dawn." I love this line, not because it makes me happy, but because it resonates with my deepest sadness. // The line "For a painted vase holds the day that's gones" made me recall with pleasure the great "Ode to a Grecian Urn" by John Keats. Did you have that in mind when you wrote this line? // The music of this sonnet is beautiful, the diction--the choice of words--is wonderful. But the emotion this poem stirs in me overwhelms me. Especially the final line, which I feel every day: "When clouds of hope bring days full of rain." --Michael LP, Mr. Poet
One of the things I discovered on this site is that there are many truly good poets here, and quite a few who write poems from time to time that show they are great poets. Consequently, I have a hard time deciding which poems to comment on. I only have a limited amount of energy and time, and I cannot comment on anywhere near the number I wish I could. // If I could only comment on one poem this month, the month of April--which is poetry month, as well as the birthday month for both me and my mother--this would be it. // This is a true "little sound"--technically or artistically well-crafted, and full of meaning, music, imagery, and emotion. Every line is a gem. For example: "The dying past weeps forgetting the dawn." I love this line, not because it makes me happy, but because it resonates with my deepest sadness. // The line "For a painted vase holds the day that's gones" made me recall with pleasure the great "Ode to a Grecian Urn" by John Keats. Did you have that in mind when you wrote this line? // The music of this sonnet is beautiful, the diction--the choice of words--is wonderful. But the emotion this poem stirs in me overwhelms me. Especially the final line, which I feel every day: "When clouds of hope bring days full of rain." --Michael LP, Mr. Poet
ritty patnaik
amazing poem dear munia !i read it with one breath,and loved it !.........ritty
amazing poem dear munia !i read it with one breath,and loved it !.........ritty
john o'connell
A true work of aesthetic art. Thank you maid and by God keep it up! Kindest regards, John
A true work of aesthetic art. Thank you maid and by God keep it up! Kindest regards, John
john o'connell
A poignant write striking home. Thanks for sharing , maid. John
A poignant write striking home. Thanks for sharing , maid. John
yelena
A beautiful sonnet in the classical tradition, just love the line 'adieu of pain when clouds of hope bring days full of rain'.Thanks for sharing:)
A beautiful sonnet in the classical tradition, just love the line 'adieu of pain when clouds of hope bring days full of rain'.Thanks for sharing:)
john o'connell
an absolutely charming poem that flows from beginning to end.
an absolutely charming poem that flows from beginning to end.
Susan Jarvis
A perfectly crafted Shakespearean sonnet with a closing couplet that touches the heart - Munia, this is a triumph, and, as you know, nothing turns my head like a good sonnet. Superb!! :)
A perfectly crafted Shakespearean sonnet with a closing couplet that touches the heart - Munia, this is a triumph, and, as you know, nothing turns my head like a good sonnet. Superb!! :)
Philip
Munia , I think perchance you are Gifted... Not by ordinary Gods but by the sacred God of Prose. So lucky to find in one so Young. Value your Gift as all we do ! Kindest Regards. Philip
Munia , I think perchance you are Gifted... Not by ordinary Gods but by the sacred God of Prose. So lucky to find in one so Young. Value your Gift as all we do ! Kindest Regards. Philip
sarwar chowdhury
Ammmmazing poetic vision! fine diction dear munia! ei je amader darshonik kobi munia!
Ammmmazing poetic vision! fine diction dear munia! ei je amader darshonik kobi munia!
sonetta
"when clouds of hope bring a day full of rain"....well this Dying Day poem isn't going to die any time soon.....!
"when clouds of hope bring a day full of rain"....well this Dying Day poem isn't going to die any time soon.....!
Frank Lambert
I like the way you take things day by day. This is a very thoughtful write, clever too and a pleasure to read.
I like the way you take things day by day. This is a very thoughtful write, clever too and a pleasure to read.
Fay Slimm
A poignant and very eloquent verse Munia - -you write in the changes from one day to another and compare different times in a sonnet of first rate rhyme. A wonderfully structured piece.
A poignant and very eloquent verse Munia - -you write in the changes from one day to another and compare different times in a sonnet of first rate rhyme. A wonderfully structured piece.
Sandra Martyres
"For the blues of heaven now starts screaming The dying day summons- adieu of pain When clouds of hope bring a day full of rain" lovely sonnet Munia
"For the blues of heaven now starts screaming The dying day summons- adieu of pain When clouds of hope bring a day full of rain" lovely sonnet Munia
A most dellightful read!