Heed! Dear, Heed!
Heed! Dear, heed!
The bell is ringing
The bird is singing
There, smiling the sun.
Come and see
The lovely scene
The sonorous sound
And joy around!
Tell me dear-
Do you have time
To stop, to watch
To listen to it?
Do you have time
To know, to think
What life is
How to lead it?
The bird sings so
The sun says so
The bell rings so
In their own ways!
albeej
The message within the body of your poem is clear but its exterior is muddied by poor grammar. One example among many is your use of “seen” instead of “scene”
The message within the body of your poem is clear but its exterior is muddied by poor grammar. One example among many is your use of “seen” instead of “scene”
you have a clear and pure message...