~Symphonies of Light
.
Exposed to starlight,
stripped bare by moonlight.
It's a conscious stream
of those living the dream,
unfolds me origamically
with every beam.
These tears on my face--
I cannot hide.
Where time and space
will soon collide.
They pry open my soul
and expose a sweet sunshower.
They strip me to bone
within one hour.
I fall like Icarus,
where my wings have failed.
My feet land on Neptune
yes!--
the moon and stars prevailed.
Where symphonies of light
will do what they'll do.
As for me--
What a view! What a view!
.
Ben Gieske
Enjoyable to read. I like the origamically unfolding image as well as your use of historic characters. Good matching of rhymes.
Enjoyable to read. I like the origamically unfolding image as well as your use of historic characters. Good matching of rhymes.
Kim Dang
i love it.
i love it.
Sandra Dodd
sensual, raw, effervescent, fun Great rhyme and tempo so cool. Lyrical I think, perhaps a song?
sensual, raw, effervescent, fun Great rhyme and tempo so cool. Lyrical I think, perhaps a song?
Munia Khan
As if each line from the very beginning steps aside for the next line's honour...very wonderful poem from the first line to the last...including the rhyme scheme and the theme.
As if each line from the very beginning steps aside for the next line's honour...very wonderful poem from the first line to the last...including the rhyme scheme and the theme.
Pendemic
Thanks for sharing such a fantastic view! This is an amazing write!
Thanks for sharing such a fantastic view! This is an amazing write!
Kerry O'Connor
This is an amazing piece, Mark. I love 'origamically unfolded', it's so original, and all the Greek allusions. Great finale too!
This is an amazing piece, Mark. I love 'origamically unfolded', it's so original, and all the Greek allusions. Great finale too!
carol
wow great poem
wow great poem
a beautiful write ! tfs this poem with us