I'm trying a Triolet form. So please don't beat me if I've messed it up :)

I looked through eyes were never cruel - Triolet

I looked through eyes, were never cruel;
O, but their looking long was naught!
Though people may have thought me fool,
I looked through eyes, were never cruel
All that for loneliness, was my school;
And by no friends, were ever sought:
I looked through eyes, were never cruel-
O, but their looking long was naught!

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sonetta
not bad at all....!
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Sandra Martyres
Great first attempt Patti...
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carol
great read
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Susan Jarvis
This Triolet is spot on - hats off to you, Patti! :)
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Ernestine Northover
Very well executed. Lovely read, well thought out.
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heterodynemind
Thanks Kerry. Glad I missed both feet with my aiming.
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Kerry O'Connor
I think this is great, patti. I like the classical feel you have going too. Very nice.
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