bad love poem
O sweet love
I love you forever
and forever
it’s true
and months and days more
all I think of is you
O sweet love
I shall always love you
always and always
O my baby
no one else has such deep love
as the love I have for you
O my darling
such love has never been seen
amongst stars or planets
as I have for you
never in all of history
O sweet love
if I do not have you
I shall kill myself
O sweet love
you are my only true love
O true love
if you do not return my love
I shall never, never breathe
it’s true
O sweet love
I love you forever
and forever
it’s true
and months and days more
all I think of is you
Raj Arumugam
Shan - splendid observation. Yes, there is that 'problem', as you have indicated. -----I mentioned once that I challenge myself (and in effect challenge the reader) in terms of poetic levels. It should have been clear - in my understanding of literary principles - that this is a poem of sarcasm and irony. First there's the title: "Bad love poem". It's a bad poem! Just as the verses of the character Bottom is in Shakespeare's "A Midsummer Night's Dream". Besides, I have left other clues. There are far too many cliches in this poem. The idea of eternity is subverted by the last 2 lines in the first and last stanzas: and months and days more/ all I think of is you...There are also many hackneyed exaggerations (I shall kill myself; I shall never, never breathe)... A careful reading is required. I have set out my answer in detail as I think your question/observation deserves the best answer I can give. Thank you for helping me articulate these issues, Shan. I am honoured to have such an insightful and perceptive reader. (I have noticed and been thinking about this 'problem' for some time now. When I take on a persona, for example, I am sometimes mistaken for the persona. I have written a poem on 'this problem' and have been holding back for a while - but I might just post it over the next few days.)
Shan - splendid observation. Yes, there is that 'problem', as you have indicated. -----I mentioned once that I challenge myself (and in effect challenge the reader) in terms of poetic levels. It should have been clear - in my understanding of literary principles - that this is a poem of sarcasm and irony. First there's the title: "Bad love poem". It's a bad poem! Just as the verses of the character Bottom is in Shakespeare's "A Midsummer Night's Dream". Besides, I have left other clues. There are far too many cliches in this poem. The idea of eternity is subverted by the last 2 lines in the first and last stanzas: and months and days more/ all I think of is you...There are also many hackneyed exaggerations (I shall kill myself; I shall never, never breathe)... A careful reading is required. I have set out my answer in detail as I think your question/observation deserves the best answer I can give. Thank you for helping me articulate these issues, Shan. I am honoured to have such an insightful and perceptive reader. (I have noticed and been thinking about this 'problem' for some time now. When I take on a persona, for example, I am sometimes mistaken for the persona. I have written a poem on 'this problem' and have been holding back for a while - but I might just post it over the next few days.)
Shashendra Amalshan
Now, here lies the problem…. I mean, more often than not you write witty, amusing pieces with a tinge of sarcasm, but when you write something like this, the reader is bit perplexed as to whether you are really trying express such tender emotions or whether there is wit even in those tender lines!! Still, a nice change and it flows really well
Now, here lies the problem…. I mean, more often than not you write witty, amusing pieces with a tinge of sarcasm, but when you write something like this, the reader is bit perplexed as to whether you are really trying express such tender emotions or whether there is wit even in those tender lines!! Still, a nice change and it flows really well
narain, jay p.
deep loving thoughts.
deep loving thoughts.
RAJ NANDY
Your love poem makes you really engrossed and the loved one more vulnerable ! - Raj
Your love poem makes you really engrossed and the loved one more vulnerable ! - Raj
Patrick McFarland
It's actually better than some of the 'serious' love poems I've seen posted over the years but who am I to judge? I dislike the medium with a passion (LOL).
It's actually better than some of the 'serious' love poems I've seen posted over the years but who am I to judge? I dislike the medium with a passion (LOL).
leafsailor
yup its cleverly bad,bad to the bone
yup its cleverly bad,bad to the bone
heather wilkins
be careful Raj. Do not get in too deep. Take a breath of fresh air please.
be careful Raj. Do not get in too deep. Take a breath of fresh air please.
Nightowl
lol, on the one side it's sweet and heartfelt and even a bit obsessive, on the other side it's a restraining order waiting to happen. Either way it's a heck of a fun read. Nicely penned. tfs
lol, on the one side it's sweet and heartfelt and even a bit obsessive, on the other side it's a restraining order waiting to happen. Either way it's a heck of a fun read. Nicely penned. tfs
lady grace
i hope this is not an ironic raj..nicely done as usual.
i hope this is not an ironic raj..nicely done as usual.
Eyan Desir
Sounds dangerous kill our self...oh boy good luck
Sounds dangerous kill our self...oh boy good luck
I enjoyed the wonderful flow in this good 'bad love poem'...forget we readers...your Love i am sure won't misjudge your words as mere fun!