Captured.
The air has grown fetid around my every dream for life
schemes to rid me of prospective romance.
I feel disadvantaged by distance, beaten by unyielding time
and mouldy again with manifold duties.
My love and I stood momentarily high on receding white
clouds which never could meet.
Rain weeps on my unkissed condition, gives me no more
chance than battling butterflies
have against wind-rattled frustrated space.
Always flattened by circumstance, drying with wait I am
nectarless not yet being sated.
How can patience keep flying against such great wastage
and still manage to smile ?
Unclad I stand, breast bared ready for nothing more than
the proverbial asp I am adrift but
captured I breath a last dream hoping he catches it.
Raj Arumugam
Marvellous lines of yearning and love - and splendid resolution to the poem in the final 3 lines, Fay...
Marvellous lines of yearning and love - and splendid resolution to the poem in the final 3 lines, Fay...
Simply Bono Razek
a most beautiful-fantastic write -Fay.....absolutely love this :))
a most beautiful-fantastic write -Fay.....absolutely love this :))
Kevin Wells
From the heart, this one. Beautiful lines. As I cannot bookmark, I will recommend!
From the heart, this one. Beautiful lines. As I cannot bookmark, I will recommend!
Shakespeares Waste Bin
Brilliant piece of penning Fay liked it a lot
Brilliant piece of penning Fay liked it a lot
T A Ramesh
Your dream only can keep your romance fresh to smile though your heart is fluttering like butter flies in frustrated space as they do now flying all the way from Canada to Mexico [News]!
Your dream only can keep your romance fresh to smile though your heart is fluttering like butter flies in frustrated space as they do now flying all the way from Canada to Mexico [News]!
tom balch
The yearning and the wanting screams from this wonderful poem, Fay.
The yearning and the wanting screams from this wonderful poem, Fay.
Ravi Sathasivam
Ecellent. Very inspiring write. tfs
Ecellent. Very inspiring write. tfs
Lynda Robson
Great write Fay,
Great write Fay,
Meggie Gultiano
another awe inspiring..excellent write!!
another awe inspiring..excellent write!!
C. P. Sharma
Reminiscent romance craves for its climax in the closing lines. Fay, heart is a butterfly flapping in time and space.
Reminiscent romance craves for its climax in the closing lines. Fay, heart is a butterfly flapping in time and space.
Ernestine Northover
How these sort of feelings overtake us when we are feeling unloved. Excellent write.
How these sort of feelings overtake us when we are feeling unloved. Excellent write.
Dream Weaver
You have captured the mood so vividly Fay! No matter if time or distance separates the emotion is the same. Closing lines are stunning.
You have captured the mood so vividly Fay! No matter if time or distance separates the emotion is the same. Closing lines are stunning.
wombat
Brilliant lines inspired by the depth of feeling. I like
Brilliant lines inspired by the depth of feeling. I like
carol
as cleopatra did such sadness
as cleopatra did such sadness
Sandra Martyres
"Rain weeps on our unkissed condition and gives no more chance than battling butterflies have against constant rattle of frustrated space." A very sad write..but so well composed with extraordinary imagery.
"Rain weeps on our unkissed condition and gives no more chance than battling butterflies have against constant rattle of frustrated space." A very sad write..but so well composed with extraordinary imagery.
Deep and meaningful writing. Thank God for writing I sometimes say. Your last line captured my heart Fay!