Be patient, here I come...

Be patient, Here I Come…


Morning rays
Light up the diamond jewels,
As it moves
Curvaceous, heaving
Its bosom like a siren,

A wanton woman;
Trying to ensnare
A gullible victim
Paying standing ovation,
With lust and desire in his eyes

Watching from the sidelines.
Comely, willowy
Gracefully undulating,
Today rain or shine

It flows,
With resolve,
Enjoying the journey
On its destination
To merge its identity
In the mighty ocean, which
Embraces with steady gaze!
And it entrusts itself headlong
To it's unexplored depths

In complete
Surrender!

MoonBee
Oh, This is Fantastic composing! ... I love the metaphors you bring out in describing the river. (Sensual, A Beautiful Temptress, Passionate) This poem is Awesome! In Nature, most times, rivers are known as "mighty river" or "Old Man River" in the male persona' ... but this tips the scale greatly in favor of the female gender ... I love water (watching it - playing in it, etc.) It is elemental-emotions at its best. And your first stanza set the pace for the rest of the poem - "Be Patient, Here I Come" ... Brilliant ... MoonBee

magnolia
Excellent metaphors, very original,great work Mamta, really delightful to read...Maggie

Kesav V Easwaran
Beautiful metaphors...one of your best poems this site, Mamta...delightful read

Fay Slimm
Wow - it swept my breath away just to read the powerful build-up in such flowing imagery Mamta - - A lovely piece.

tom balch
A beautiful journey, mamta. Flows as easy as the river.

Lynda Robson
Wonderful Mamta, almost like a seduction :)

RAJ NANDY
Mamta ji , I loved the eloquence & the imagery ! But was not sure if I had caught the inner meaning , till I read Gita's comments , which is not mentioned by the other three ! So I take it as a beautiful ode to the Sun the giver of life & light ! -Raj

Sandra Martyres
Amazing imagery Mamta....your imagination scales to new heights here...

Cat
Great lovely, most seductive too

sarwar chowdhury
wow! great wording! Graceful! what a lively movement of feelings! Full of energy and beauty! Excellent radiation! I am touched by your words's waves!

Gita Ashok
Mamta, this is such a beautiful ode to the Sun. I like the comparison you have made here. The flow of this verse is as smooth as the flow of the Sun rays. The title is awesome. The last stanza is terrific! Great work, Mamta!