The Onomatopoeia Tornado (Concrete Poem)
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Hold on to your head head hold on to hell-p duck in the
...doorway No NOT quack quack duck, kids duck down
......in the door way! meeOW meeOW WoooooOOF
.......WooooooOOf Patch stay! I'll hold your cc collar
........meeOW....I'm coming Fluff! STOP scratching
............your claws! STOP I said look!!! The tree
..............it's cc coming CRASH CRASHing glass
...............window HELL-P my God can you see
.................bulls outside bellow bellow? th th
..................thunder run with cows all of you
.....................Mooooo Mooooo Pleeeeease
......................move cows go Buttercup go
............................keep with the cattle
.............................it's a whorled dust
..............................devil ROARing as
.................................a freight train
...................................Ooooooooo
.......................................but it's
.......................................turned
........................................really
.......................................turned
.........................................gone
.........................................phew
..........................................sob
.........................................blue
.........................................light
.........................................safe
........................................thank
.........................................God!
.........................................sniff
...........................................we
...........................................are
..........................................safe!
Karin Anderson © 2011
All Rights Reserved
Published Sketchbook
May/June issue 2011
Marvelously poignant, this made my heart begin to race! La, how in the world can mere words...?? Superb! What a tribute to the horror of a twister, not to mention, in its shape! The excellent magery evoked terror, affection, victimization, deliverance, relief. Fantastic!
Oh my God, Karin, the tornado of images, alliteration, auditory stimulation, so many things and creatures demanding time and attention, you have really captured what sometimes a chaotic day can be like. And the ending- well all is well that ends well. Impressive, delightful, full of tension and of course release in the end with a sigh of relief! the form, structure and the image you have chosen completely in sync with the theme.
Wow! This poetic tornado took my breath away as I read, Karin. Soooooo creatively inked and complimented by your excellent choice of Artwork! A stunning write, which I have so enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing, Karin. God bless you always.....
Karin you always surprise your readers with something new and amazing. thanks
What a whirlwind of a poem could see the cows and bulls floating by with a very original idea could see it and feel it...great work again...regards
Great penning of a unique theme that stimulated not only my brain but ears and eyes as well. Love the excellent structure and the shape that your words in this "onomatopoeia tornado" have created - that of a wine goblet! Exemplary work, Karin.
Woww, this one is different. I loved the auditory images and format you used in this poem. Loved the uplifting rhythm, this one really fixed my mode. Yes, only you could have written something like this.
I agree with Susan....extraordinary poetry Karin....
Only you can write such a creative verse Karin.I Love the theme,love the shape and I love every single line from this tornado of a creation.Simply brilliant! I am in awe.
wow Karin, only you could capture the tornado in poetry so perfectly... much much enjoyed this delightful uplifting write. thank you. :)
Fascinating poem, Karin... I'm smiling and enjoying your wonderful creativity very much... Great format to play with :)
A turbulent creation!
Karin you are really the "Cat's Meow!" and sooooo dog-gone clever...what a beautiful tornado of a poemmmmmmmmmmmm! The form is Priceless.... I would like to enroll in yoour next class! Dorothy A Poet Who Loves To Sing
You have drawn tornado picture in poem! Nice effort!
Karin, brilliant ! Thought it was going to be serious, but you brought a smile to my face. Very well crafted..Maggie x
Original and refreshing to read... much enjoyed!
Clever, imaginative illustration of Onomatopoeia poetry, Karin...enjoyed
ahhh..enjoyed reading this, Karin..It made me smile!!
Great read Karin and the tornado like construction and words add to the poem's urgency..
this is wonderful Karin:) made me smile.
Well this is for sure the best example of a Concrete and Onomatopoeia Poem all rolled into one ....... "Ker-Ching" Give this girl de Money !!! Philip