The Guy Who Wasn't There
Sitting on a park bench
cutting up a pear
Having me a talk with
a guy who wasn't there
People passing by, they
all gave me funny stares
But I just kept on talking
to the guy who wasn't
there
Then a man in uniform
said 'son come on with me.
You’re scaring all these
people with this friend
they cannot see.
I’ll take you to a special
place and they’ll give you
lots of care
And they’ll help you with
this fantasy of talking to
the air'
I said 'well OK officer
I’ll gladly come with you
But what about the thousand
folks all sitting in the pews?
I saw them at St. Timothy's
all packed in like sardines
Talking to some other guy
that no one's ever seen
So I think it would be prudent
And I think it's only fair
That you send a couple
buses for them people
over there.
Then take the great big lot
of us yes all one thousand
one
Over to that special place
you mentioned in line one
Or maybe it was line thirteen
in truth I do not care
As long as we can all converse
with the guy who isn't there.
This is fantastic. Great write.
Complete, with all the makings of a classic. Loved this one. An absolute stellar write!
Fabulous, inspired and touched with deep insight into life and its meaning and That which we call "God"...Great narrative as well, Patrick
Should Christ return they would soon have him in the nearest mental hospital
Excellent! Witty and well penned. Nothing wrong with an imaginary friend, as long as you don't start killing others who don't believe in your particular imaginary friend....
This is fabulous. x
I took my time getting to this Patrick, It's been one of those weeks. But by heck, I'm bleedin' glad I made it here at last. You had me with the intro but the poem itself has blown my socks off - bookmarked. Brilliant. Love it to pieces. :) kath xxxxx
Ha ha... I guy tells me he talks to God, he's got my admiration. He tells me God talks to him, he has my awe. He tells me God gave him a message for me then what he'd better have is medical insurance : D
GOD AND A GUY WHO NEEDS GOD'S CARE // The message that God is like a guy who isn't there, / Isn't light--it's heavy as lead--and dark as night. / I like what Robyn Selters said; she hit the nail right on the head. / For belief or hope in God, we can add to religious vision, that baffling intelligent precision / We see in the simplest cell, and staggeringly in the human brain. / Yes, the world has lots of suffering; and the chief objection, truly, is so much terrible pain. / And the suffering and dying of my life's best friend, which I had to see, / My beloved friend Brian, has made me weep and fear to face eternity. / But still, when we speak or pray to God, though we may not know / If he hears us or sees us or cares about our weal or woe-- / And I must confess, I did not get Yes as the answer to many a prayer-- / Yet still I think some other people may have, and I think that maybe even I have-- / Without knowing or noticing--and I still have hope for life beyond the grave. / For me, for you, and my precious friend Brian, I pray that God is there to save. / I hope that some day, some way, God will say / He approved the way I chose to play my part in this great cosmic play. / Though I see reasons to think that maybe my life is something for which God does not care, / Other reasons tell me maybe God does care; though life seems so unfair. / But mostly, it is intelligent design I see in life, that tells me God is there. / Probably there. Very likely there. / And I know that if God proves to care, / Then I might have future joy, to compense me for my pain's despair. / If not, then I am one who soon will be a real gone guy--a guy who isn't there. / Talk to me. --Michael LP. Friday-10-14-2011 11:24 PM PDT.
Incredible sense of timing and rhythm. Thanks. -Harriet
Had a chuckle with this... Beaut introduction too... and maybe you're right that we can't assume that there's anyone listening in the second scenario...perhaps there's other reasons for that besides the question of that one's existence ... Guess we can't know for sure just yet. May I respectfully offer the thought, though, that there may be some more rational evidence for the Other Guy Up There existing (intelligent precision even in the simplest living cells that has many scientists baffled), than in the first instance you have mentioned, where there is no effect of any intelligence in the surroundings that could be observable or verified. Nevertheless, I had to smile for this is a very cleverly conceived and written poem :)
wow - Patrick this one is brilliant - loved it!!
perfect rhythm you've got here! enjoyed the read :-)
An excellent piece. Great of you to broach the subject and put us in touch with his thinking. Can't help thinking it would aid the reader if you would alter the format, especially as it seems to be a rhyming poem. it would really flow much better and enhance the experience. Well done. Shall read some more.