Investment lesson 101.
Reach for the sky
Reach for the sky, if you'd fall,
on the soft clouds you'd land.
But not in a desert, no clouds,
probably fall right back on the sand!
Dorothy A. Holmes apwlts2
Perhaps fall back on the sand and dream of what might have been at another time and place...I love and appreciate the idea of "reaching" for the sky...rainbows are there! Dorothy A Poet Who Loves To Sing
Perhaps fall back on the sand and dream of what might have been at another time and place...I love and appreciate the idea of "reaching" for the sky...rainbows are there! Dorothy A Poet Who Loves To Sing
Elena S
As short, but is to say a lot , enjoyed it , thank you for share.
As short, but is to say a lot , enjoyed it , thank you for share.
carol
but at least you tried
but at least you tried
LightH2O
short and sweet.
short and sweet.
Lynda Robson
Just so long as its a soft landing... good write
Just so long as its a soft landing... good write
stevenstirk
Either way a soft landing. Enjoyed.
Either way a soft landing. Enjoyed.
The contextual flow is a bit rough but the metaphorical Idea is a sound one. The poem needs a rewrite. It would also be great if line 1 rhymed with clouds/ beclouds, shrouds, enshrouds, crowds. Or if line 3 rhymed with fall, which has a lot of rhymes. Rhyme scheme (ABAB). It would mean rewording while maintaining your thought. YOU have the metaphor in tact. just a bit of shuffling in the lines is needed. The writer's best tool is his vocabulary. A poet friend//RH Peat