Err...
You discoursed me on twilights
…outlined the visibility…
that separated the muted crimsons
from the dark
You told me the skies
were not just a sum total
of one’s breaths…
They were the amalgamation
of individual dreams
floating on dewy blues
You said
Time was not just
a matter of moments…
It was a pattern of tiny eternities
Stitched in un-erred regularities
You called monotony beautiful…
and..
I believed you.
Leonard Dabydeen
You layered the cream of your thoughts with such ambiance. Your poem is excellent. Riveting emotions !
You layered the cream of your thoughts with such ambiance. Your poem is excellent. Riveting emotions !
GEETASHREE CHATTERJEE
This is simply beautiful
This is simply beautiful
robyn selters
Wow! You know just how to pull a punch... leading the reader onwards, lulled into believing... then drop the last verse... Sad, but brilliant
Wow! You know just how to pull a punch... leading the reader onwards, lulled into believing... then drop the last verse... Sad, but brilliant
nimal dunuhinga
The belief...............'You called monotony beautiful' that river flows smoothly!
The belief...............'You called monotony beautiful' that river flows smoothly!
Nikunj
Visibility has got a new meaning and sense with this piece and skies have got a new definition and monotony would become the most sought after thing after this piece ...your poetic charm is as magnetic as it could ever be ...god bless
Visibility has got a new meaning and sense with this piece and skies have got a new definition and monotony would become the most sought after thing after this piece ...your poetic charm is as magnetic as it could ever be ...god bless
seema chowdhury
Very nice and beautiful.
Very nice and beautiful.
William Bonilla
I awe at your every written thought making me grave for more of your words unwritten.....Love & Peace be with you.......William
I awe at your every written thought making me grave for more of your words unwritten.....Love & Peace be with you.......William
narain, jay p.
Nice poem.
Nice poem.
Abhinav Baruah
A smooth flow from beginning to the superb ending ! Nice read !!
A smooth flow from beginning to the superb ending ! Nice read !!
La Finita
Candorous, mystic, innocent feeling. Bookmarked!
Candorous, mystic, innocent feeling. Bookmarked!
Debs
Simply a super write Sri.
Simply a super write Sri.
carol
awesome write
awesome write
Ency Bearis
great poem with the logic reason
great poem with the logic reason
Ken e Hall
Like the poem your words are little gems stitched together with your mind and our pleasure...regards
Like the poem your words are little gems stitched together with your mind and our pleasure...regards
Sandra Martyres
You said Time was not just a matter of moments… It was a pattern of tiny eternities Stitched in un-erred regularities Anotherpoetic gem from your talented pen Sri
You said Time was not just a matter of moments… It was a pattern of tiny eternities Stitched in un-erred regularities Anotherpoetic gem from your talented pen Sri
Adwin Singson
And because of the belief everything exists...very nice poem.
And because of the belief everything exists...very nice poem.
Ata
" You " was ( is ) so wise ,if I were you I would believe " you" too ,tfs
" You " was ( is ) so wise ,if I were you I would believe " you" too ,tfs
very clever and skillfull build up of stanzas - and a great punch line at the end, Sridevi