not easy to get rid of shadows....
Shadow Play
I hear your footsteps
but you’re not there
I hear your voice
but it's from elsewhere
I feel your touch
or so I thought
But it's just my mind
playing jokes
I hear you calling
but it's in vain
It’s just my own voice
echoing pain
I see your shadow
but you’re not there
Your so-called love
now hanging stale
© 2011 Sonya Florentino
photo by Molly Dolly
http://www.flickr.com/photos/mollymarie6/4334911565/
Ron Peat
What we reach for eludes us; sometimes we need to do by not-doing, and the what is eluding us arrives on its own. The shadow is there but just out of reach. Arrive within one's self and the shadow arrives as well without reaching at all. The depth of the poem is fantastic a very poignant. A poet friend//RH Peat
What we reach for eludes us; sometimes we need to do by not-doing, and the what is eluding us arrives on its own. The shadow is there but just out of reach. Arrive within one's self and the shadow arrives as well without reaching at all. The depth of the poem is fantastic a very poignant. A poet friend//RH Peat
Meggie Gultiano
It’s just my own voice echoing pain ...............deeply touched by these lines
It’s just my own voice echoing pain ...............deeply touched by these lines
Raj Arumugam
song-like and very captivating, Sonya
song-like and very captivating, Sonya
Karin Anderson
You have created an eerie melancholy mood for me Sonya and your feelings are so creatively portrayed, more so too, with the picture you have selected. "hanging stale" really did it for me!
You have created an eerie melancholy mood for me Sonya and your feelings are so creatively portrayed, more so too, with the picture you have selected. "hanging stale" really did it for me!
robertchoward
Very fragile but rich imagery in which "shadow" is extended to the senses of sound and touch as well as sight. Beautiful language perfectly matched to the content.
Very fragile but rich imagery in which "shadow" is extended to the senses of sound and touch as well as sight. Beautiful language perfectly matched to the content.
carol
great write shadows do remain
great write shadows do remain
Lynda Robson
Great write Sonya, the shadows remain to haunt....
Great write Sonya, the shadows remain to haunt....
Botan
facinating words
facinating words
Kesav V Easwaran
moving...creative piece...the short verses add to the poignancy inside
moving...creative piece...the short verses add to the poignancy inside
Fay Slimm
So moving this write on shadow-play Sonya -- I can relate to almost all stanzas - an evocative read.
So moving this write on shadow-play Sonya -- I can relate to almost all stanzas - an evocative read.
Jenny Gordon
Wow! Excellent! It poignantly expresses the misery of the haunting shadows' torment, evoking the sentiment of the wearying frustration in the vaporous shadows unreality in their flirting tease. Beautiful and so aptly expressed! La, I hope it is not for real for you. Wonderful conclusion!!!
Wow! Excellent! It poignantly expresses the misery of the haunting shadows' torment, evoking the sentiment of the wearying frustration in the vaporous shadows unreality in their flirting tease. Beautiful and so aptly expressed! La, I hope it is not for real for you. Wonderful conclusion!!!
You know I love the heart telling of it's pain...so passionate in its truth...heart and head at war!...Wonderful! Dorothy A Poet Who Loves To Sing