© RH Peat 7/24/2011 1:17pm
Form 3 tercets/ 9 lines
for my brother who died
in San Jose 7/2/2011
Photo for Challenge/ weekly facebook poems
Loss Of Day
The Loss Of Day
To walk the boardwalk toward the sea
to sadly greet the sullen dusk and
the forlorn skreee from drifting gulls.
A pale light breaks across the shoreline
where grey clouds hang low and level
over the ocean’s shuffled waves.
The sunset glares behind a mist and
a breeze presses steady where the land
slips into tides; seen slides into unseen.
© RH Peat 7/24/2011
Sylvia Marquetta
Ron, I send a heartfelt condolence to you at the loss of your brother. You have described this setting sun so well.......(seen slied into unseen) a most rememberable closing.
Ron, I send a heartfelt condolence to you at the loss of your brother. You have described this setting sun so well.......(seen slied into unseen) a most rememberable closing.
RAJ NANDY
Ron , you have paid a worthy tribute through this poem to your dear brother who is no more ! Sorry to hear the same , -Raj
Ron , you have paid a worthy tribute through this poem to your dear brother who is no more ! Sorry to hear the same , -Raj
Fay Slimm
Sympathy in your loss of a brother dear Ron - the verse depicts the transition so well - "seen slides into unseen" is so very apt.
Sympathy in your loss of a brother dear Ron - the verse depicts the transition so well - "seen slides into unseen" is so very apt.
Bob Blackwell
Ron, draw a solemn picture, with shades of grey clouds and a slow moving sea. I love the phrase 'oceans shuffled waves. A sad goodbye to your brother, but a very fine poem. Sorry for your loss.
Ron, draw a solemn picture, with shades of grey clouds and a slow moving sea. I love the phrase 'oceans shuffled waves. A sad goodbye to your brother, but a very fine poem. Sorry for your loss.
Nikunj
Hey ron ..I am sorry to learn about your brother. May god bless his soul .Kindly convey my condolences to your family...the poem aptly describes a transition where seen is sinking into an unseen ..where one becomes the part of the great creator himself ...
Hey ron ..I am sorry to learn about your brother. May god bless his soul .Kindly convey my condolences to your family...the poem aptly describes a transition where seen is sinking into an unseen ..where one becomes the part of the great creator himself ...
Frank James Ryan Jr./FjR
Ron, i am so very sorry for your loss, my friend...The prayers of my family and me go out to your family, in-laws & you with much Respect, Sympathy and Condolences....I am quite certain your Brother must have read your work, and the above piece dedicated to him, is peacefully gripping...spilling with lamentive serenity, and a more than subtle intimation that the two of you shared a love for the ocean & all its quelling nautical elements...~FjR~
Ron, i am so very sorry for your loss, my friend...The prayers of my family and me go out to your family, in-laws & you with much Respect, Sympathy and Condolences....I am quite certain your Brother must have read your work, and the above piece dedicated to him, is peacefully gripping...spilling with lamentive serenity, and a more than subtle intimation that the two of you shared a love for the ocean & all its quelling nautical elements...~FjR~
my sympathy for your brother's loss...the poem and the image says so much but remember, on that same horizon, the sun shall rise again......