“Fraternized”
Standing on the same feet
she went twenty nine years back
where nothing could be remembered
but she could imagine those days
unaffected, filled with innocence;
full of wonder.
She’s now standing
by the same window,
but couldn’t look into one moment later;
nor could she imagine
what awaited her after a while
A ray of light from her dreams?
Or a glimpse of shadow
from the damp corner
of her seasoned plight?
Pleasure of pain?
Or a suitable place
to stash away her whim?
Nothing seemed to be cared
And all she could really feel
was just another heart beat
fraternized with ache
Written on 6th July,2011
©Munia Khan 2011
erik99
The passage of time is one of the best subjects for poetry, so it has been handled again and again, making it difficult to be original, but your description of standing between the past and the future is all it should be.
The passage of time is one of the best subjects for poetry, so it has been handled again and again, making it difficult to be original, but your description of standing between the past and the future is all it should be.
Sana Rose
A narrative nostalgic write... With many questions bounced at what became about what could have been... Looking back could be painful...and sometimes rewarding when we are able to accept what has changed... Well felt, Munia..
A narrative nostalgic write... With many questions bounced at what became about what could have been... Looking back could be painful...and sometimes rewarding when we are able to accept what has changed... Well felt, Munia..
MoonLi
Superb!
Superb!
Jenny Gordon
Wow. So bittersweetly beautiful, the scene drawn and painted with almost a careless brush yet so perfectly that it evokes the poignant sentiments and the fraternized heartache. Lovely and so sorrowful. Excellent!!! ...Excellent imagery as well!
Wow. So bittersweetly beautiful, the scene drawn and painted with almost a careless brush yet so perfectly that it evokes the poignant sentiments and the fraternized heartache. Lovely and so sorrowful. Excellent!!! ...Excellent imagery as well!
Nikunj
The depth in this piece hits hard ..life and its visscicitudes , memories and their spell ..unceratinty and the treasure trove of suspense ...all bound within these verses , with a fine thread of imagery ....wow is the word
The depth in this piece hits hard ..life and its visscicitudes , memories and their spell ..unceratinty and the treasure trove of suspense ...all bound within these verses , with a fine thread of imagery ....wow is the word
eleanor prince
I'm so moved by your poem... I can sense the pensive mood the ambivalence, the ache... this is superb penning, Munia
I'm so moved by your poem... I can sense the pensive mood the ambivalence, the ache... this is superb penning, Munia
Philip
Apply more Poetry to your open wounds. I find that the best way to heal the pain.
Apply more Poetry to your open wounds. I find that the best way to heal the pain.
Meggie Gultiano
i can see and feel there are pains in every line. The pains that live and will always live inside..It is better to shake it off and to dust it will go.It has nothing to do with the presence. As they say...go go go and move on.. I love how you presented this..from the beginning to end.. A beautiful piece, Munia..maybe some can relate to this..
i can see and feel there are pains in every line. The pains that live and will always live inside..It is better to shake it off and to dust it will go.It has nothing to do with the presence. As they say...go go go and move on.. I love how you presented this..from the beginning to end.. A beautiful piece, Munia..maybe some can relate to this..
Philip
Another Great concept Munia....Written in the NOW. That is the best place to be to write PERFECT POETRY.
Another Great concept Munia....Written in the NOW. That is the best place to be to write PERFECT POETRY.
Karin Anderson
An intriguing poem Munia which has the reader thinking which makes for excellent poetry. I wonder if her memories have been wiped out because of trauma yet a glimpse of a shadow maybe lurk. Another unique poem from your talented pen.
An intriguing poem Munia which has the reader thinking which makes for excellent poetry. I wonder if her memories have been wiped out because of trauma yet a glimpse of a shadow maybe lurk. Another unique poem from your talented pen.
sonetta
a very strong poem Munia...and like her, we too wonder.....
a very strong poem Munia...and like her, we too wonder.....
La Finita
Deep and very personal. Great write!
Deep and very personal. Great write!
magnolia
this is so deep a story, wonderfully told. Fraternized with ache.Excellent Munia...Maggie
this is so deep a story, wonderfully told. Fraternized with ache.Excellent Munia...Maggie
Fay Slimm
Excellent content Munia - every line engaging the reader.
Excellent content Munia - every line engaging the reader.
Kesav V Easwaran
"heartbeat fraternized with ache"- this expression constitutes the soul of your beautiful poem Munia
"heartbeat fraternized with ache"- this expression constitutes the soul of your beautiful poem Munia
Ben Gieske
I like the way you capture these feelings. This like I like: glimpse of shadow from the damp corner of her seasoned plight? The fact that you have her standing by the window says more than what you attend too. It provides some hope for a new view of a promising future.
I like the way you capture these feelings. This like I like: glimpse of shadow from the damp corner of her seasoned plight? The fact that you have her standing by the window says more than what you attend too. It provides some hope for a new view of a promising future.
Sandra Martyres
Sme memories should neither be recalled nor relived - I agree with Stella...A very thoughtful piece Munia -well written as usual
Sme memories should neither be recalled nor relived - I agree with Stella...A very thoughtful piece Munia -well written as usual
Lynda Robson
Brilliant poem Munia, standing on the same feet, looking through the same window, but everything has changed,
Brilliant poem Munia, standing on the same feet, looking through the same window, but everything has changed,
Bob Blackwell
Shows us that life is really only now, memories can be recalled but not lived again and future is a mystery. Lovely words Munia, a thoughtful poem.
Shows us that life is really only now, memories can be recalled but not lived again and future is a mystery. Lovely words Munia, a thoughtful poem.
Ency Bearis
Awesome poem, expressed the thoughts eloquently
Awesome poem, expressed the thoughts eloquently
PrEmJi PrEmJi
muni, this poem is a gem...
muni, this poem is a gem...
I liked your third-person insight...as a reader, I felt both distant and close.