Loneliness - a senryu suite
on a damp dark night
in flickering candle light
she counts the shadows
the patter of rain
on her windowsill disturbs
her concentration
a lonely victim
of old age in a fast world
the choice is not hers
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Palas Kumar Ray
The images are too talkative Sandra.How come there's no light when poetry radiates warmth all around?
The images are too talkative Sandra.How come there's no light when poetry radiates warmth all around?
york2frisco
In this senryu triumvirate each is worthy to stand alone, but together they are superb. Love this!
In this senryu triumvirate each is worthy to stand alone, but together they are superb. Love this!
Shriram Sivaramakrishnan
very touching...a classy one!
very touching...a classy one!
Chris Jibero
So cute!
So cute!
Ezna Stephna
Beautiful and expression of a lonely victim is expressed well.Sad that when we get old the world return it face from us.
Beautiful and expression of a lonely victim is expressed well.Sad that when we get old the world return it face from us.
Asoke Kumar Mitra
lovely write,ultimate destination...simply stunning write
lovely write,ultimate destination...simply stunning write
sensebreeze
Lovely...
Lovely...
cyclopseven
Old age and loneliness is the worst crime of humankind against humanity. Perfect to the point. Well focused.
Old age and loneliness is the worst crime of humankind against humanity. Perfect to the point. Well focused.
Dorothy A. Holmes apwlts2
Wonderful as there is a special truth in what you write... Dorothy Singing A Sad Song...
Wonderful as there is a special truth in what you write... Dorothy Singing A Sad Song...
mamta agarwal
a perceptive comment on times we live in; you sum it up in the last senryu Sandra. It's pathetic how in old age parents have no one to count on. very well captured with compassion
a perceptive comment on times we live in; you sum it up in the last senryu Sandra. It's pathetic how in old age parents have no one to count on. very well captured with compassion
robertchoward
Stunning! I love the extension of the Haiku form into a larger structure.
Stunning! I love the extension of the Haiku form into a larger structure.
patspoems
This certainly brought a tear. Such a beautiful write with such feeling and imagery. Thank you..... Pat
This certainly brought a tear. Such a beautiful write with such feeling and imagery. Thank you..... Pat
Angelina Pandian
Sad and lonely.... waiting ..... your poem sits heavily upon the heart and wets my eyes..... truly a problem of the new age..Sandra such abeautifully expressed poem...
Sad and lonely.... waiting ..... your poem sits heavily upon the heart and wets my eyes..... truly a problem of the new age..Sandra such abeautifully expressed poem...
Bob Blackwell
Beautifully written, with empathy and understanding. The real question is why do we become a problem?
Beautifully written, with empathy and understanding. The real question is why do we become a problem?
Meggie Gultiano
wow Sandra!!this is a perfect piece!! a reality of a person's journey of life, and you have brilliantly said this in few words..i love this line,"the choice is not hers"..an affirmation that we cannot control our life..SOMEBODY up there is..BEAUTIFUL!!! WORTHY of a bookmark!!
wow Sandra!!this is a perfect piece!! a reality of a person's journey of life, and you have brilliantly said this in few words..i love this line,"the choice is not hers"..an affirmation that we cannot control our life..SOMEBODY up there is..BEAUTIFUL!!! WORTHY of a bookmark!!
Dream Weaver
this is quite simply beautiful writing Sandra
this is quite simply beautiful writing Sandra
Cat
sad note here. kudos.. Cat
sad note here. kudos.. Cat
Gita Ashok
Empathy and a humane side of one's personality are what it takes to write poignant verses such as these.
Empathy and a humane side of one's personality are what it takes to write poignant verses such as these.
Jenny Gordon
Wow. Superb poignant depiction! Seems so very aptly realistic. How sad. Modern society's problem hit on the head so perfectly, as we all live for ourselves as fast as we can, and then count the shadows alone. Excellent!
Wow. Superb poignant depiction! Seems so very aptly realistic. How sad. Modern society's problem hit on the head so perfectly, as we all live for ourselves as fast as we can, and then count the shadows alone. Excellent!
Theresa Ann Moore
I have an eighty-eight year old aunt who lives by herself and she said the one thing she misses is companionship. This poem reminds me a lot of her situation.
I have an eighty-eight year old aunt who lives by herself and she said the one thing she misses is companionship. This poem reminds me a lot of her situation.
Raju Baruah
beautiful as always..TFs
beautiful as always..TFs
Bob Blackwell
In life as we get older for some life shrinks, this is so unnecessary, even though the choice is not her own. A caring thoughtful world, one where everyone is loved, is so needed in our world. You are so right to point this out Sandra. I hope someone smiles at you today.
In life as we get older for some life shrinks, this is so unnecessary, even though the choice is not her own. A caring thoughtful world, one where everyone is loved, is so needed in our world. You are so right to point this out Sandra. I hope someone smiles at you today.
Ken e Hall
I spoke to a lonely old man in a home today it blew out his flickering candles...nice senryu...regards
I spoke to a lonely old man in a home today it blew out his flickering candles...nice senryu...regards
RAJ NANDY
Well said Sandra ! This site is great for driving away the greater part of our loneliness through interaction ! It has also been my observation that people writing frequently about Love feel its absence in their lives too ! Thanks for sharing , -Raj
Well said Sandra ! This site is great for driving away the greater part of our loneliness through interaction ! It has also been my observation that people writing frequently about Love feel its absence in their lives too ! Thanks for sharing , -Raj
robyn selters
Wow! This really impacts... very fine concepts and poetry that is memorable...
Wow! This really impacts... very fine concepts and poetry that is memorable...
Ben Gieske
Dark-rain-loneliness are a lot to deal with. Great combination.
Dark-rain-loneliness are a lot to deal with. Great combination.
Simply Bono Razek
no one should ever be lonely...touchingly beautiful-Sandra
no one should ever be lonely...touchingly beautiful-Sandra
magnolia
You describe old age perfectly in this great sen series.A sad part of life...Maggie
You describe old age perfectly in this great sen series.A sad part of life...Maggie
narain, jay p.
Nice poems. Old age is lonesome age.
Nice poems. Old age is lonesome age.
Chaos1214
If poignant was ever meant to describe anything, this piece is it.
If poignant was ever meant to describe anything, this piece is it.
Kesav V Easwaran
old age life is like flikering candle light...good write Sandra
old age life is like flikering candle light...good write Sandra
T A Ramesh
Flickering light, rain lashing on window sill and loneliness are all wonderful settings to brood over many matters to produce many ideas in poetry!
Flickering light, rain lashing on window sill and loneliness are all wonderful settings to brood over many matters to produce many ideas in poetry!
Gordon
days like this are a real stinker,well versed Sandra
days like this are a real stinker,well versed Sandra
Indira Renganathan
Wonderful portrait of reality Sandra...you've marvelled
Wonderful portrait of reality Sandra...you've marvelled
Lynda Robson
Lonliness is awful, you have captured the feeling well Sandra
Lonliness is awful, you have captured the feeling well Sandra
DavidPaulley
A stoic write.
A stoic write.
Juan Olivarez
What a lovely senryu, just beautiful.
What a lovely senryu, just beautiful.
carol
good poem
good poem
Fay Slimm
A poignant piece of truth Sandra - meaningful lines.
A poignant piece of truth Sandra - meaningful lines.
Nikunj
This reflects the reality of the times ..captured so very well in beautiful verses ..
This reflects the reality of the times ..captured so very well in beautiful verses ..
a very touching poem sandra...in spite of the modern old age homes..a shift from home at that age really puts one down