it's a dark poem...but at least I'm writing....better than nothing ...(i've since then edited this....to let in some ray of light....)
Dark Waters (edited)
I am lost ...
I’ve lost my voice
my touch
my connection
I’m floating in the middle of an ocean
where dark waves wait to swallow me
and silence to drown me
My anchor is broken
There is no light
anywhere on the horizon
I am lost at sea
Struggling once again to find me
© 2011 Sonya Florentino
photo by Miss Moa
http://www.flickr.com/photos/missmoa/3762053624/
Kesav V Easwaran
Poetry is all about telling your thoughts beautifully and attractively...i don't see you get drowned anywhere in this write...it isn't dark either...you have brought out your feelings imaginatively Sonya...
Poetry is all about telling your thoughts beautifully and attractively...i don't see you get drowned anywhere in this write...it isn't dark either...you have brought out your feelings imaginatively Sonya...
Jenny Gordon
So beautiful and indeed hauntingly eerie, with the deep murky depths of silence and unknown burying the sweet voice that struggles to find it's foothold. I like it very well. It aptly expresses with beautiful imagery the dilemma mayhap of writer's bloc, or some other silencing ocean swallowing the mermaid. Lovely.
So beautiful and indeed hauntingly eerie, with the deep murky depths of silence and unknown burying the sweet voice that struggles to find it's foothold. I like it very well. It aptly expresses with beautiful imagery the dilemma mayhap of writer's bloc, or some other silencing ocean swallowing the mermaid. Lovely.
Karin Anderson
Artistically presented Sonya, stark and vivid poetry and your struggle will bring the light you need I'm sure and I really like Carol's idea of looking for a brighter star to take you home~~
Artistically presented Sonya, stark and vivid poetry and your struggle will bring the light you need I'm sure and I really like Carol's idea of looking for a brighter star to take you home~~
Munia Khan
As though you are reading my mind and writing it !!! Perfect poem dear Sonya..my day has been brightened with this piece..Loved it.
As though you are reading my mind and writing it !!! Perfect poem dear Sonya..my day has been brightened with this piece..Loved it.
Ency Bearis
Ask the guidance of Greek Goddess Artemis - the goddess of light and protector of the vulnerable, he might help. Great provoking piece, sentiments well versed.
Ask the guidance of Greek Goddess Artemis - the goddess of light and protector of the vulnerable, he might help. Great provoking piece, sentiments well versed.
Weeping willow
Often our light is obscure in the clouds of our mind.In haze it still stands beside in a lowly light,waiting to burst into a bright light. Nice one.
Often our light is obscure in the clouds of our mind.In haze it still stands beside in a lowly light,waiting to burst into a bright light. Nice one.
Frank James Ryan Jr./FjR
DID I NOT TELL YOU THIS WOULD HAPPEN?!Talent such as you possess, natural congenitel artistic skills do not get misplaced...only we, as meticulous ,anal perfectionists do///////////////////////// "And amidst this dark, there be a grean light of poetic Renaissance"(that be you & this poem,missy)! Now,piggy-back on this,and soar on back to the Heavens, Sonya...You Rock ! ~FjR~
DID I NOT TELL YOU THIS WOULD HAPPEN?!Talent such as you possess, natural congenitel artistic skills do not get misplaced...only we, as meticulous ,anal perfectionists do///////////////////////// "And amidst this dark, there be a grean light of poetic Renaissance"(that be you & this poem,missy)! Now,piggy-back on this,and soar on back to the Heavens, Sonya...You Rock ! ~FjR~
carol
look for a bright star it will take you home safely
look for a bright star it will take you home safely
Lynda Robson
Sometimes we all get lost and things can be dark, but there is always light at the end of the tunnel, you just have to look for it xx
Sometimes we all get lost and things can be dark, but there is always light at the end of the tunnel, you just have to look for it xx
Ben Gieske
Your anchor is broken and you're floating, so you are on your way - just subject to the currents. The sun will soon rise.
Your anchor is broken and you're floating, so you are on your way - just subject to the currents. The sun will soon rise.
Ata
yes it is a little bit dark but so so deep and I know this feeling that you penned in your poem so well ,so I wouldn't call it a dark poem only a soul's poem ,tfs
yes it is a little bit dark but so so deep and I know this feeling that you penned in your poem so well ,so I wouldn't call it a dark poem only a soul's poem ,tfs
kath
We're all lost in the dark at one point or another Sonya. Yet from such darkness you have created a beautiful piece of poetry, and that alone tells me that the sun will shine again for you. kath xxx
We're all lost in the dark at one point or another Sonya. Yet from such darkness you have created a beautiful piece of poetry, and that alone tells me that the sun will shine again for you. kath xxx
Meggie Gultiano
perfect combination of your graphic and your piece.
perfect combination of your graphic and your piece.
Sandra Martyres
Yes dark it is, but well written with vivid imagery - and it is so good to see that your muse is back Sonya...the picture you have selected is ideal ....
Yes dark it is, but well written with vivid imagery - and it is so good to see that your muse is back Sonya...the picture you have selected is ideal ....
I love the subtle rhyme scheme here, and the sentiment behind the beautifully crafted words - a triumph of a poem! :)