This is another effort of mine on Concrete poetry.. A Concrete poem is one that takes the shape of the subject within..and we all know that a star is a written light in the dark that can fall apart ...
“Star”
...................................I...................................
..................................am...........................
..................................not...........................
..................................the........................
............................... moon.....................
................................in the...........................
..............................western..........................
......................... sky that longs......................
....................to embrace the sinking.......................
....twilight in the horizon of the dusky azure............
........................I'm a written light................
............................on the sky........................
...............................loving.............................
.................................blue.......................................
..................................and..............................................
..................................you..........................................
...................................am.............................................
....................................I.....................................................
Written on the night of the 1st June,2011
©Munia Khan 2011
Thank you I saw the evening star!
Wow! Beautiful! Excellent! Takes the shape perfectly and is so delightfully woven and laden with its topic! I really like it! Wonderful!
Wow... bravo! :) brilliant and beautiful, in form and message! :) well done, Munia!
what a marvelous message you hide behind this beautiful form! bravo Munia!
This poem makes me smile! you are lovely!
This must have taken a lot of time and effort, but it was worth it. The shape is perfect, and the lines and line breaks are all natural - if only everybody were so particular, instead of breaking lines just anywhere! And a good poem too - quite an achievement
for sure you're a written light in the sky Munia and shining brightly w/ these concrete poems!!
They say a picture paints a thousand words so by my count, you've got 1036 amazing words here Munia. Beautifully written and very creative.
wow!! you did this again my dear..simply stunning and good job..
Simply stunning. Great work Munia...Maggie
Creative and beautiful
Munia -this is absolutely beautiful-so creative-wonderful wonderful~~
I see the light within that you describe and it is inspiring... as is your poem in this wonderful form
you tell the star i am you...the revelation of the star inside- the written light...superb philosophy Munia...
Wow! I love the way you did this... superbly creative... magnificent
Your starry creativity stands out brilliantly here Munia....great work
A wonderful example of creative work - - well done indeed Munia -- a star you certainly are.
Just like the brilliance of a star this poem is brilliant Munia snd you are the star!!
I am be-dazzled by your skill and application Munia ...Well crafted !!!
Nice creativity, well done. A great piece.
Much, much to learn for me... this is great!